|Reviews for Untitled|
| Ron chapter 1 . 12/3/2000
| Kate Davis chapter 1 . 12/2/2000
There’s an ad campaign running in my country where the ending line is "Never lose sight of the bigger picture". Don’t get caught up in the small-minded ways of the people who one day will claim they new knew before you were famous. And you can smile and say that they never knew YOU at all. Great topic, great poem, and I loved the last line. Perhaps it would be more powerful if you made it 'I am' instead of I’m, but it was a perfect way to end this piece.
| leah-chan chapter 1 . 11/29/2000
| Unicraze chapter 1 . 11/14/2000
...to you. Wouldn't that be a good ending? "I'm not listening to you." ...Okay, anyways. Nice poem, I like the point. _
| Pippi chapter 1 . 11/14/2000
I like the feeling. I don't know how you could improve on it. The part where you say "I'm not listening" is kind of, ummm..., sad. I mean, you're at least trying to reach the stars, I hope, or are you reaching for something else? Don't make it any longer though.