Interesting...you got good characterization, plot, a nice fucked up villian...Its good.

You're a brilliant writer coming up with unconventional relationships that keeps the reader like myself interested. I think about the dialogue and how it's too much of it of the time but it helps I guess. Almost reminds me of James Baldwin...

Anyways, PLEASE UPDATE THIS STORY!

whoa...good chappy. paul knew! i'm so surprised. kia's not evil after all, she just wants some lovin'...mkay

betrayal! but who is paulie betraying, shep or kia? and what of lisa?

god this story is brilliant, i don't know what i think about kia, except that she needs to give shep the chance to deal with life on his own terms...as a bisexual, i have gone out with many types of people, male, female, or some that are like shep...some that are male and didn't used to be. but the truth is, shep is right, he was always a male, and it was selfish of kia to try to make him stay in a place he wasn't truly comfortable, where he wasn't truly himself. i've always admired transgenders for their bravery, for the fact that they are true to themselves when so many are not. I hope so much that he and lisa can have a wonderful relationship...that she will be able to understand...i really hope so because you know, gender doesn't matter, it really is the person, the face, the soul, not the gender that you love. kia needs to learn that, but most of all she needs to grow up. I know that I am not really accepted in the lesbian community because, as a femme bisexual, a lot of women are scared that i'll leave them for a man, and then it's the same in the straight world too, when i meet people now, potential lovers, i'm the straight forward with them, because that way i get it out of the way, a lot of people don't accept bisexuality because they think we can make up our minds, they don't realize that it is possible to love both genders, to love people regardless of gender, and to tell the truth, i have had more relationships with women then with men, although, i am not biased at all, i still like both, but sometimes i have difficulty trusting some men, yet it's different with transgenders, because they are so honest in the first place, i mean they are honest enough to themselves to do something that others might not accept, and they are different because unlike people on either side of the gender spectrum, they realize that gender isnt that big of a deal, because they have been both, in a sense, and i have no problem trusting them, because they aren't stuck to conservitive viewpoints they are very open minded, and attractive if i might add, they are becoming more accepted in society, i mean, lately all the teen magazines have been publishinig stories about transgender teens who struggled with it, and who became what they knew they were, they became true to themselves, and they are loved and they are still the same, that's what people don't get, that if you change genders it doesn't make you any different then who you were before, you are just more yourself in a way, you are comfortable in your body, some find it strange how sensitive i am to transgenders how much i want them to be accepted and stuff, most people are surprised that an extremely femme girl, understands how it can be so hard to try to hide who you are from people, i know what it's like to try to explain my bisexuality to people, to lovers, and people, like kia, can sometimes be too selfish to understand, they are like, but who do you like better? in the end it's all about being yourself, in fact i don't think i'm really atracted to gender, it's the person that matters to me, i get satisfaction from either sex, but i really have no preferences, maybe lisa will understand all that, that gender doesnt matter, maybe she'll blow the socks off of everyone with her empathy and ability to understand, and still want a sexual relationship with shep, maybe she'll surprise them all, maybe she'll be a rebel against her father, i don't know..i just think it's sad how gender biased people can be, because, really, we are all a balance of the yin and yang inside our hearts, we need to learn to realize that we need to forget about all those stupid fanatical viewpoints, and just realize that in the end we are all capable of loving either gender, that it really is the person. the way they move, who they are, their smile, that's what we are really attracted to, not their gender, gender really does not matter...i really think people are beginning to realize that, society is opening up it's doors more then it has before, and though there is still a lot of work to be done before any of us are truly accepted, we are already halfway there, with transgender and gay/lesbian/bisexual issues being covered in magazines with extreme ease, in the fact that the articles are not biased at all, and i don't know, but maybe one day there will be less kias in the world and more people like shep, who don't care about gender politics, who just want to accept and be accepted...

i know i wrote too much, but i really like this story, it's really well written, well thought out, and maybe it'll open peoples minds a little bit, i love shep, he's so sexy, and you have done an amazing job at creating a story that sucks me in completely, now go ahead and update while the inspiration is still there!

oh...good chapter...

Dang, I'm really liking this story so far. So, please, do post up more soon.

Greetings and llama's to you my friend. Telling half truths Shep is now? We both know that it's only gonna come back and bite him in the ass in the end. Technicalities aside, he's quite possibly going to regret that later. Great work as usual! You get dried pineapple galore!

Aww, I love Shep and Kia melodrama! One of my favourite updates of my favourite story. Great characterisation of Shep, by the way.

Hmm, wow. This is an amazing story. I just happened upon it while "flipping" through the different areas (I don't stray much out of Lord of the Rings and Star Wars) and decided to read it because it sounded interesting and, shit, I love it. I have some friends and know others who are in situations sort of like this, not transgender, but gay and bi, and I really have not seen any good stories that involve these sorts of issues. All there is on this site is slash and that stuff is starting to disgust me. I digress.

So, this is an amazing story and I cannot wait for more.

-Rogan-

good chap...shep seems like hes really hurting over what happened and is just pretending to be over it...am i right?

Cool update! I like that line about Kia never being involved with Shep 'the man'. You should update more often!

Awwww shit. He's done it now. I hope that you get to update soon cause I really like this fic and I can't wait to see what happens!

I still don't like Kia...but atleast now I know a little more about why she's like that...

I really like this fic despite the reviews about not liking Kia...lol

that is so sad.