Reviews for The Kingdom of Gold
XtrremeFrolicker chapter 2 . 11/15/2005
I aboslutely adore your story! I realize my review may be a little late, but I just thought that I would share that with you. Just to offer a bit of constructive criticism: you may want to work on slowing the plot down a little. Or making it seem like you slowed the plot down, but still keep it short for people like me who have the attention span of a fruit fly. I'm rambling. Anyway, I really like the way you introduced the magic. That was pretty cool. Keep on writing!
xraspberrykissesx chapter 1 . 1/31/2005
WOW!nice intro!so... capturing!
sheza chapter 2 . 12/10/2004
This is getting exciting. I wonder what that servant girls name is. That tatto idea is pretty cool. A few grammar mistakes in this, but easily fixed.
sheza chapter 1 . 12/10/2004
Good work! I don't think I saw a single grammar or spelling mistake in that introduction/prologue. You obviously revised it really well.
Dragen Eyez chapter 5 . 5/19/2004
we keep writing!
Dragen Eyez chapter 2 . 5/19/2004
i can't wait for more!
Lila Telrunya chapter 5 . 4/16/2004
It's good, it just needs to be finished. It needs to be proofread too, but so do my stories. Keep up the good work!
Anastra chapter 5 . 10/13/2003
Please update soon!
Parn Capricornious chapter 5 . 10/6/2003
It's really cute so far. There are minor errors in there but there was only like 3 within the entire thing. Keep writing and check out some of my stuff. hehe
lizziep chapter 5 . 9/12/2003
m...excellent, though i see you haven't updated in a while...will u please update soon?
Lizziep chapter 4 . 9/12/2003
very good, you write really well...did lily have a dream? it must have been... anyway very good!
NthNinth chapter 5 . 8/18/2003
is Lily the princess?
abbey chapter 5 . 8/14/2003
i really like it. it's quite very interesting. i hope you can upload the next chapter soon.
Chaotic Child chapter 5 . 8/12/2003
cool. Is lily the princess? Or related to her? that would be cool. update soon!
D.Y chapter 1 . 7/16/2003
Sweetie, you don't have to explain yourself. I personally don't care about how long your chapters are as long as the story is good.
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