I aboslutely adore your story! I realize my review may be a little late, but I just thought that I would share that with you. Just to offer a bit of constructive criticism: you may want to work on slowing the plot down a little. Or making it seem like you slowed the plot down, but still keep it short for people like me who have the attention span of a fruit fly. I'm rambling. Anyway, I really like the way you introduced the magic. That was pretty cool. Keep on writing!

WOW!nice intro!so... capturing!

This is getting exciting. I wonder what that servant girls name is. That tatto idea is pretty cool. A few grammar mistakes in this, but easily fixed.

Good work! I don't think I saw a single grammar or spelling mistake in that introduction/prologue. You obviously revised it really well.

we keep writing!

i can't wait for more!

It's good, it just needs to be finished. It needs to be proofread too, but so do my stories. Keep up the good work!

Please update soon!

It's really cute so far. There are minor errors in there but there was only like 3 within the entire thing. Keep writing and check out some of my stuff. hehe

m...excellent, though i see you haven't updated in a while...will u please update soon?

very good, you write really well...did lily have a dream? it must have been... anyway very good!

is Lily the princess?

i really like it. it's quite very interesting. i hope you can upload the next chapter soon.

cool. Is lily the princess? Or related to her? that would be cool. update soon!

Sweetie, you don't have to explain yourself. I personally don't care about how long your chapters are as long as the story is good.