No! Please don't take offense at my honest opinion, but this is an awful ending. First of all the chapter was full of spelling errors and second it was all a dream. I mean, how lame can you get? It would be better to kill them both off than have it be all a dream.

This better be an April Fools!

This is actually a review about ch. 40 because it says i've already reviewed it or something. Dunno what that's all about..

Anyway, this is for April's Fools i take it :P I was shocked at first because of the spelling errors and the (what i thought was) an annoyingly horrid ending! This took me forever to figure out as well. I'm so relieved though. That was a very clever prank :P

Happy April Fools!

Haha, you got me at first. Happy April 1.

Well fuck me. Lol. I feel super ridiculous now. I didn't even see all the blaring mistakes that were in this chapter because I just wasn't paying attention. I was too busy going, "huh?" Shame on me.

Just ignore my previous comment and delete me please. I didn't even read the reviews already left and feel uber silly and am more convinced it was a good old fashioned AF prank. A good one, too.

Now I'm just left doing the whole face-palm thing. Lol.

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Unsucessful troll is unsucessful.

Damn, it won't let me sign in and review cause I've already reviewed this chapter... but anyway, best April Fools day thing so far, I was giggling like a dork at the "Listen, lady. I told you knot to keep candles lit when ur hosting a propane tubberware party in the mourning." line. P

Although, *gutted* that it wasn't an actual chapter, the cliff hanger from the last one is still annoying me. P

So this wouldn't let me review properly for 40 because I'd commented on your Author's Note chapter, so the numbers and stuff were screwy.

Anyway, I'm going to be honest here... the ending was a bit disappointing. I mean I can see the reasoning in it sort of. There was an explosion in the beginning that knocked her on her butt and the one in her 'dream' shocked her awake or something.

But I just can't help but feel a little let down. You've created James and given him such an explosive personality that the reader gets sucked into and then it turns out, he's just a figment of Sam's imagination?

Now, if this story had been solely from Samantha's POV, this ending would make a little more sense. But there were parts from James' perspective that takes away the believability of the 'it was just a dream' scenario.

I can definitely understand the desire to just wrap up a story and be finished with it. Sometimes a story just needs to end. But I think there could have been a way to include what happens with James. Even a 'one year later' scenario could have worked just so that he wouldn't have been even less fictional than he was to begin with.

I'm hoping this was an April Fool's chapter/ending. If it's not, then I'll just say congratulations on completing an eight-year project.

Haha! I remember the last time you did this!

APRIL FOOLS!

... What? : I'm really, really confused? Does this mean your not finishing it properly? Or this is the proper finish? : If so... there are a lot of spelling mistakes? : Please explain..

This is for April Fool's, right?

APRIL FOOLS!

(I hope)

DEJAVU!

FROM LAST YEAR

or is it like ten years ago _

update soon!

Okay, so this is hilarious. And such an awesome example of amateur fan fiction...are you sure it's not written by Stephanie Meyer? BUT...let's finish up strong! I mean, what?

Okay, so here I am about three days later, delivering my second review, as promised. I re-read all of this and though it took me a little while, it was so worth it.

I can't believe you started this when you were in middle school! That's crazy. There are are definitely some grammatical/punctuation issues throughout the beginning of the story, but it's very minimal compared to some of the other atrocities out there, especially on this site. And you were still just learning the mechanics at the time! Goodness. In your profile, I think, you said that writing wasn't something you took seriously or some such like that and to me, that makes it even more impressive.

And usually when I read something that's had as many gaps in updates as this, there are numerous inconsistencies and things just get lost in translation, but not this. There are no plot-holes (none that I can see, anyway) and every character's personality has stayed consistent, so definitely good job on that.

The only thing that sort of bothered me a little bit was Samantha's personality after her "encounter" with Max. Yeah, everybody reacts differently to given situations and with Sam, you've created a strong enough character to make it more... passable. But she was tortured, nearly to death, and aside from the nightmares, she didn't really change all that much. Something like that could have easily triggered Post Traumatic Stress disorder, a fear of men (or bulky men like Max), a more withdrawn personality... Just some things to maybe think about if you ever decide to do a re-write of this somewhere.

That being said, I do love how strong you made her. I've read so many stories with similar beginnings where the heroine was just his whiney, annoying helpless girl who did essentially nothing to get away from the attacker(s). I LOVE that Sam was none of the above and even with her broken leg, she still tried relentlessly to get away from James. Her self-preservation kicked in and I honestly thought it was amusing how much she was annoying him.

Another thing is that I absolutely laughed at the acronym you chose for your government agency. IDK. I Don't Know. LOL. I don't know if you intentionally did that or not, but that was still kind of funny.

I also liked the progression of Sam and James' relationship. You didn't have them jump in the sack the minute they realized their feelings for each other and I absolutely thank you for that. The personalities you created for both of them, especially James, though, wouldn't have allowed it and had you done it any sooner than what you did, I think it would have been out of character. So once more, yay for consistency!

There are just so many other things I want to comment on, but we'd be here forever. So I think I'll just go ahead and close it off here.

Once more, I'm so sorry that you got the P word. People that do that are just pathetic, really. Bunch of lazy thieves. Thank you for all your hard work and determination to finish this! It started in '02 and you're still going strong. :D