God that woman's good...

Aw... thats so cute! I always liked him!

Great job! love the story but now I'm going to give you my opinion on this story. I know you said you are in the re-editing process which is cool just a few pointers:

1. In the beginning of the story don't skip so much time. I think there was a moment where you skipped a period of about a month. You should have atleast done a couple of the first days. Layed out a plan about what would happen if the bad guys came, etc.

2. This story is really good! The plot is exceptional, but i think it could be even better if you did draw out her recover time. I think that was the part that got kinda slow.

3. Your characters are good and they have a good core essence, but you need to develope your characters a little more. There are also things that you could explain early on that would make things a little better.

4. Give a little more background on James. I wanted to know more. I understand about leaving the part about his brother out of the way but, I don't know, I was hoping for a little more.

5. You are a great writer. So I would definitely think about rewriting this. You could make it 10 times better. I know you say you are burned out, but to be honets, I think I could see this in a movie. Your plot is exceptional.

Please answer me one question: WHat the heck does IDK stand for? that has been bugging me the entire time :)

This is an awesome story. I understand not wanting to finish, but thanks for posting what you have! Well done.

n...N...NO! Update! Please!

Finally answers.

Why in the world does he want her?

I'm really curious.

omg you can't just stop there that isn't fair! this is the only thing that i have been reading cause i can' find any desiccant books or fiction stories hurry!

please update son!

ir fic is rlly good and i rlly wanna know what happens next

ok so i know that zack is the bad guy here but i cant help but love him. hes soo damn funny

Write more please! Quickly!

Who is this guy? I guess I'll find out as I read on. Anyways, lovely start and I can't wait to see what happens!

wow, great chapterish...haha I really like it so far. I think you're right about your writing maturing (in the first chapter) which I think is great! It's nice to see that you are actually using this as a chance to improve your writing. The only sad part is that you're losing interest in this story. It's a great story you know and hopefully something will come to you soon. I can't wait to check out your other stories :) well you're on my alerts list so I'm waiting!

I think you should do whatever you want and finish the story the way it needs to be finished. Whether that'll take 2 chapters or 20 you do what you need too :)

You're a nice person, aren't you? Of course you are.

Therefore, you shall update (soon).

Updating would make some weird french girl living in Bangkok (aka me) happy, and that's a once in a lifetime opportunity, so think about it, will you?