I Loved It Please ontinue soon!

This was good! I'm glad you are still continuing with this story!

that wasnt bad at all! why didnt u post it as a regular update? u should of just kept that and then say how they got out or something. it was good.

hey, this wasn't as bad as you think. I really liked it and most certainly can't wait to read more

~mel

I LOVE THIS FIC! I JUST LOVE IT! It's one of the best I've read on this site! It's really interesting and I'm hungry for more! Please update soon.

Okay! So since I can't review for chapter 38, I'm using this one. First off, thanks for the update! Been waiting for it. I'm glad that they finally found each other. It took forever. Also I thought it was pretty dumb of Brian to do that. Just hope that they actually make it out of the building. Thanks and update soon! :)

Aw! You leave us in suspense! No! HOPEFULLY, not for too long...(hoping) Anywho even though it was slighty shorter than normal, it was great lol, so update soon! :D

HC

NO! SAVE BRIAN!

btw great chapter.

:)

Hey, I like this half-chappie! It was short, yeah, but it was exciting. Keep writing.

Hmm. I feel like the knowledge about Samantha's parents being dead could have been slipped it, subtly, before. Here it's almost like an afterthought. "He just mentioned her mother. Oh, and by the way, her parents are both dead." Maybe I missed it, but this sounds like the first time we're hearing about it.

'That man is the ultimate evil, working toward chaos and destruction.' sounds pretty corny to me. I feel like this description of Langston would have been more realistic if you had used specifics instead of generalizing his organization as 'equivalent to an international mob'. Even if it is. Give us specifics of what terrible things this guy actually does and then make the generalization. Otherwise it sounds to much like some nonspecific evil.

So she's just getting released with a bodyguard. I kind of expected it to be more exciting than that. I mean, obviously something will happen later on, but I expected them to have a better reason for 'kidnapping' her than wanting to protect her. A more selfish reason why they need her around.

So we have some more details. The people who set the bomb off weren't these people, and the 'nice guy' was actually a bad guy. Suspected as much, since James seems to be a protagonist in this story.

Every time I read that Samantha 'hikes her chin up another notch' it puts the image in my mind of someone sticking their nose obnoxiously high in the air, kind of in a goofy, overdone way.

I'm not really a fan of describing people using measurements in height, unless the POV character is really good at guessing exact heights for some specific reason. Most people don't think 'Hmm, that guy is about 5'8"'. They generally just think, short, tall, taller than they are, shorter than they are, or sometimes 'Over six feet' or some round number like that.

I liked the conversation between James and his superior (and I'm glad he has a name now!). It gives some more hints as to what's going on, and makes me want to know more about this paramilitary organization (which is what I'm leaning to believe this is). The other man was thoroughly creepy, so I hope that was your intention. Maybe it was just the fact that he kept calling her dearest.

Overall, a good, short chapter to advance the plot. So far the pacing has been just about where I would want it. Quick enough to keep me interested, slow enough that I don't feel overwhelmed with information and revelations.

And, I'm glad there was no more passing out in this chapter. :)

Update again soon please! Thank you for finally updating, but now the cliffie is just stretching out longer. And this story is so good:) Please update soon.

-Ardy

I like this a lot so far. You've done a good job making me want to figure out who this man is and what his intentions are. He killed someone, but they don't seem entirely bad.

He seems to have planned to kidnap her, or at least kidnap someone. Wouldn't it have made sense to set the child locks on the door? Or at least take some sort of measure to keep her from escaping, especially once she's awake.

Two chapters, two falls into unconsciousness plus one fake one. Ugh. I know it's dramatic, but if she faints/gets drugged/passes out one more time I think I'm going to start hating her.

This sounds like an interested romance novel. I don't read many, but I'm pretty sure they don't generally start of with bombings and kidnappings.

I'm not going to bother getting nitpicky about any of the writing in these early chapters. I can understand that you wrote them over five years ago and probably every comment that can been made has been.

The only thing I'll mention is that it's a bit heavy-handed they way she notices that he's 'good-looking'. Personally, I think the fact that she notices anything about his facial features during something like this tells us that he's made an impression. It's too beat-you-to-death obvious that he's going to be a/the romantic interest.