Reviews for Stargazers
nemissis chapter 1 . 9/13/2004
The united terran republic is recruting young men and women choose from a variety of positions marien pilot intellegence officer enginnering ect
p.s. this is not a hoax thw U.T.R has not yet been fully established but with our growing numbers ans funds it will be a matter of time befor we take off
for more info email me at
nemissis chapter 1 . 9/13/2004
The united terran republic is recruting young men and women choose from a variety of positions marien pilot intellegence officer enginnering ect
p.s. this is not a hoax thw U.T.R has not yet been fully established but with our growing numbers ans funds it will be a matter of time befor we take off
for more info email me at
nemissis chapter 1 . 9/13/2004
The united terran republic is recruting young men and women choose from a variety of positions marien pilot intellegence officer enginnering ect
p.s. this is not a hoax thw U.T.R has not yet been fully established but with our growing numbers ans funds it will be a matter of time befor we take off
for more info email me at
nemissis chapter 1 . 9/13/2004
The united terran republic is recruting young men and women choose from a variety of positions marien pilot intellegence officer enginnering ect
p.s. this is not a hoax thw U.T.R has not yet been fully established but with our growing numbers ans funds it will be a matter of time befor we take off
for more info email me at
nemissis chapter 1 . 9/13/2004
The united terran republic is recruting young men and women choose from a variety of positions marien pilot intellegence officer enginnering ect
p.s. this is not a hoax thw U.T.R has not yet been fully established but with our growing numbers ans funds it will be a matter of time befor we take off
for more info email me at
Lady Patience chapter 5 . 11/6/2003
Lea, my very dearest, I love you.
Alone in the Desert chapter 5 . 9/20/2003
Never fear! Or and Cassy fit perfectly into the greater scheme of things. You'll understand more about them once chapter 6 is finished.
Rae Waterfeild chapter 5 . 8/11/2003
wow, thats such a great story. i love the sarcasm and bold sensesof humor. one of the best things ive read here!
talkingbanana chapter 5 . 7/30/2003
oh, this deserves many more reviews than it has. let's see what i can do to help...

chapter 4 threw me off a bit - i'm not following where it fits between 3 and 5. :\

other than that, great work & keep it up!
Alone in the Desert chapter 4 . 4/23/2003
I WILL update this with the next (already written) chapter. Probably not for a while, thought. Hold in there! Please?
cbprice25 chapter 3 . 1/30/2003
I liked this chapter, update soon!
MyMy chapter 1 . 1/14/2003
I like this, good start. In an answer to your review, thanks for the compliments. Yes I'm aware my punctuation and such needs help. I didn't understand what a period was for until fifth grade, it's something I've always had trouble with. Amy does seem older than 15, you're right, I did that on purpose. If you really wanna know why, you can e-mail me or IM me, both of them are on my profile. But yeah, good story, and thanks for the review.
cbprice25 chapter 2 . 1/9/2003
This sounds very interesting, I hope you update soon!
Kitty Ryan chapter 1 . 1/3/2003
A well written start! I love the friendly relationship between office-staff - It makes me want to work there. I can see how Val might be a little daunted or off-put by it, though. I admore everyone so far for striving to include him. I also feel very envious of Sophie, having such caring friends in her workplace, to miss her while she's away. I can't wait to meet her.

“Most of my writing was done on vacations, when I had a lot of free time,” she replied.

“Didn’t you get that feeling, though?” he insisted.

“What feeling?” she asked.

He looked like he found it hard to explain, and for a time the general table chatter was all Hazel heard. “The feeling that there’s a story, or a poem, or something inside you, nagging to get out, and you have to put it to paper, right now,” he finally said. “That urgency, knowing that you have something good and if you don’t answer its call you’ll lose it forever.”

That, is perfect. You mirror my feelings in Val's words, as well as yours, and most probably all that write. Beautifully done. I am in awe.

actually, that was the original reason I did,” agreed Val with a smile. Then the food started coming, and the conversation around the table mostly died out. A little later he caught Hazel’s eye and she realized she’d been studying him. She looked away, though; office romances were forbidden, and so only rarely did anything amount to more than tension and casual flirting.

This...could be improved. It's very unsubtle, and, I think, unnessecary. You're overplaying a point told perfectly well in the (excellent) part about Chrissie and Eric further down. Hazel saying, in such bald terms, that an office romance is awkward and improper is a bit like her telling us 'water is wet'. I'd keep the

eye-contact, but lose the explination. Do you really need it?

Anyway, that's just my thoughts. This has been an enjoyable read that I hope you add to, soon. I feel quite attached to these characters already, and would love to see how they end up.

Love you!

K.
S. R. Segrist chapter 1 . 1/3/2003
Good start. I think the dialogue realistic and it flows well. I'd like to see more development of each individual character. Good start.
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