Reviews for Dreams that have Gone
forgottenmoon831 chapter 1 . 5/30/2004
Excellent job! I really liked the ending! Very good use of questions, too! Keep up the good work!
Zauriel chapter 1 . 1/4/2004
Ah, what a nice poem. delightful.
Dreams eh? You make them sound like they're alive.
Ailes chapter 1 . 11/21/2003
I do too, actually o-O; MY favorite stanza has to be:

Do they go to Paris and fall in love?

Do they go to the Milky Way to eat cheese?

Will they take their lives easy?

Or work hard like buzzing bees?

Hehe... I love your writing. Keep up the awesome work.
SweetGrape chapter 1 . 11/19/2003
Kinda wistful and wondering- 'Will I get the same fantasy', although it has darker bits 'become deceit and lies' and the last lines.

'Milky Way to eat cheese'... I just love cheese so I had to mention it ;) That stanza makes this a much lighter and cutesy piece than it otherwise would be, I reckon.

Interesting musings 'jobs with humans/ And they flee when it's done':)

The rhythm is out of whack a few times, so I suppose this could be polished.
obsidian katana chapter 1 . 11/8/2003
great poem! nicely written, very thought-provocative. i like this. good work. keep it up! and thanks for your reviews also.
Saranacian Freak chapter 1 . 11/8/2003
They definitely go to the Milky Way to eat cheese. Very nice, I liked.
splotchikins chapter 1 . 9/26/2003
No matter what you say, I'm gonna read your poems and tell you that... I LUV IIT! _ Another wonderful poem and another wonderful job. .~ It makes me wonder also where my own dreams have gone... *can't remember most of her own dreams* ._.; Anyway, like I said, I really like this piece! But I gotta run... got school... *stress mark. eye twitches* But I'll read more of your poems once I get back... we get off early today! Yes! WEll, see ya! And... NICE JOB!
Iceal chapter 1 . 9/12/2003
Naj, i'm in awe...

I didn't know that you could be this romantic, how come this talent didn't unfold when we were still in elementary...

did you know that you surprise me, you're terrific, amazing and a perfect poet...

Are you in love?
Iceal chapter 1 . 9/12/2003
Naj, i'm in awe...

I didn't know that you could be this romantic, how come this talent didn't unfold when we were still in elementary...

did you know that you surprise me, you're terrific, amazing and a perfect poet...

Are you in love?
Ice Lynx chapter 1 . 9/6/2003
Wow, beutiful. I luv this poem, and thanks so much for reviewing my work! No, it wasnt me in the story, but I feel like that sometimes. Mary Jane is a fictional charecter I've thought about for a long time, and decided to post on here.

I luv ur poem and will read more asap, bye 4 now!

-Ice Lynx
blessed-goddess chapter 1 . 7/11/2003
Do they go to Paris and fall in love?

Do they go to the Milky Way to eat cheese?

Will they take their lives easy?

Or work hard like buzzing bees?

O that was funny heh heh. A lighter piece...oh and by the way, i would LOVE LOVE LOVE 2 go to Japan, maybe even China more so.
Lets Play Russian Roulette chapter 1 . 6/26/2003
hey, ish me again! ( hehe ).

Anyway, this poem is REALLY REALLY good! i love it! it kinda makes you wonder too...

you're a great poet so don't give up.

~Meeh~

P.S. you don't need to review any of my things...i haven't updated anything in a LONG time.
Janne Doe chapter 1 . 6/2/2003
Beautiful!

I wish I could have some of my dreams twice...

But sch great wording and imagery! Wonderful work!

T~H
Val Mora chapter 1 . 6/2/2003
I would give you my half-believed 'theory' on where the dreams go, but it might be the focus for a short story I may someday write. o.O

Hmm, this was very good, except for the last line of the last verse, which seemed kind of awkward and out of tandem with the rest of the work. Also - not all lines must end in punctuation in poetry. You seem to think that they must, and while I can excuse it if you're doing it on purpose, it looks mighty odd - especially in the first verse, where it really bothered me. The third line should either have no punctuation at all, or a question mark, or a comma. Not a period. *shivers*

That said, other than that, this was quite good, and I enjoyed the musing on a question I myself have. _

Also, thanks for the review for "Artist of Life" - and as to a comment in your review: don't we all wish our stories were reality? I certainly do. _
cosmo-queen chapter 1 . 6/1/2003
Excellent poem, you raised some really thought-provoking questions. I have often wondered the same things, where have all my forgotten dreams and thoughts gone. I wish I could access them again. This is a very deep concept, keep writing :)

*cosmo-queen*
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