Reviews for Love Under Logic: Beautiful Lily Alice
mysticgrl98 chapter 40 . 3/7/2004
WOW! i have to say this story is one of the best stories I have read on fiction is incredibly good...its weird how this affected me...i dont see that many bi-sexual stories out there so im glad someone did it...awsome job i cant wait till u write more
musicgirl225 chapter 5 . 12/4/2003
ah yeah...i have a friend that's a bit like michelle...its quite sad, really...but i dont want to give up on him...short, but nice chapter...
musicgirl225 chapter 4 . 12/4/2003
i sometimes wonder what would happen if i or someone else were to commit suicide or something...i often think about it actually...its interesting to think of...'nother good chapter, i like how jessica comforted alice...could easily be just as a friend, or something more...we'll have to wait and find out...
musicgirl225 chapter 2 . 12/4/2003
ooh, great chapter...i can identify with the feelings alice is going through, you portray them beautifully! almost word for word sometimes what i think!
musicgirl225 chapter 1 . 12/4/2003
ooh, this is an awesome start to the story, i cant wait to read the rest of it-this subject has always interested me, and it's interesting to see it written from a first person POV, i love the inner monologue...well im gonna go to the next chapter!
esotericblood chapter 40 . 11/23/2003
I just read this entire story in one day. It took me about 4 and a half hours, but I did it. I couldn't stop reading. This story was just so ... real! Innocent, but at the same time dealing with the loss of innocence, and the added element of it being against the 'norm'. This story truly filled me with lesbian pride (well, bisexual, actually).

The really cool thing is, just before the weekend (and today is sunday) my gym teacher (who is evidently a lesbian) decided to create a group in our school just like your Difference group. We don't have a name for it, and I think we really only have 6-10 people behind us, but the idea was just conceived, and I hope it'll be good for our school's GLBT community :)

Okay, one more neat thing I have to point out; one of the first entries, when you had Alice have that nightmare, which came true but to some girl she barely knew, Alice noticed how nobody cared about the girl until she died. Then, in some of the later entires, Jessica and Alice both talked about how they didnt realize how much they loved each other until separation. I dono, I just thought the coinciding points were cool, whether it was intentional or not.

Anyway, awesome writing! I can't believe how much I just loved this story! If you get a chance, maybe read some of my work too ... it's mostly just depressing poetry, but meh. I want to get started on some short stories. Anyway, I'm rambling. Keep up the incredible writing, though.
insert name here chapter 40 . 11/22/2003
ok wow, that was really well written, although i am heterosexual, i still enjoyed reading this, and i feel that u portrayed the thoughts and feelings very well, it was a beautiful piece of writing, and also inspiring, i think this is a piece that should be published, because it not only is about a difficult topic for many, but it shows the dificulties of society, amazing job _

Blue Rose 2 Lay Z 2 log N chapter 40 . 9/7/2003
Wow, your story was amamzing! I'm sorry I didn't review more than once, as to when it was moved to , it was taken off my favorites cause the link didn't work anymore. Anyways, I love your story and I always wanted to go fing it again, but yet since I'm too lazy to even log in, heheheh... So thanks for e-mailing me about the story, I finally got to finish it and I will start to read the sequel!
Savin chapter 40 . 8/7/2003
OMG! This is just excellent! I just loved every aspect of this story! I read this straight through from chapter seven! This is! I can't believe that their parents would try to separate them! And I don't really understand why they were punished for being the way that they are either in chapter 39 but that's just me. Very good! Very, very, very good! You are truly the greatest writer that I have ever met! Keep it up, Fakan!
Savin chapter 7 . 7/30/2003
I finally got around to reading this and I have to say this is great! I can't believe how well written this is! It's! And I love how you've written this in a diary type format. Definately has to be easy writing! This is'm almost speechless! You've got me hooked on yet another one of your series _ Keep it up buddy!
Aryaveiel Skycryer chapter 27 . 6/7/2003
"We waited four weeks before having sex". OOh. Bully for you. I don't care what gender or orientation you are, that's still not nearly enough time to wait. I'm thinking five years would suffice.
Aryaveiel Skycryer chapter 17 . 6/6/2003
Just so you know, the Bible only says "A man shall not lie with another man as he would lie with a woman". Says nothing about girls and girls.
Aryaveiel Skycryer chapter 7 . 5/19/2003
Ha. You sure do have idealistic lesbian relationships. "I love this girl, but does she love me? Oh, she does! I know because she kissed me." This almost never happens in real life, in any sort of relationship. Be nice if it did, eh?
MICHELLE chapter 40 . 4/12/2003
okay jon, here is the deal. I do not like the second to last entry. it seems too rushed. It almost makes my head spin. I was aliitle shaky about the final entry too, until I thought about it. It has a sense of maturity about it. It is good to leave it in the story. AND WAHT DO YOU MEAN "WHY AM I HERE?" WHAT IS WRONG WITH YOU? I LIKE TO SUPPORT YOU AND YOUR WRITING. WHETHER A STORY IS GOOD OR BAD, AGAINST EVERYTHING YOU HAVE BEEN RAISED AGAINST OR NOT, PEOPLE READ STORIES THAT MAKE THEM FEEL. i FELT MORE SUPRAISED AT WHAT I LEARNED ABOUT YOU FROM THIS STORY THAN ANYTHING. TALK TO YOU AT SCHOOL MON.
lamiapiratess chapter 40 . 3/12/2003

I just finished reading this story! I love it! It was really good and it wanted me to keep on reading! Answers to some of your questions: please keep the outside world references, it makes the reader believe its going on right now, and the dates are fine, but if you publish this I think it would be nice not to have a year b/c then it makes the reader guess and wonder when Alice wrote her diary. Keep up the good work!
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