Reviews for Need chapter 1 . 7/15/2005
Good job...God loves you!
Christine Bahrens chapter 1 . 10/8/2004
b0o chapter 1 . 3/30/2004
your not shit at sex scenes!
i liked it, although the grammar could have been better, the punctuation was confusing as some sentences were almost 5 sentences. other than that, i enjoyed it!
keep on writing!
jOYp chapter 1 . 12/17/2003
WOW .. keep going
Sheone chapter 1 . 5/30/2003
Not bad at all. I would suggest you work on punctuation - some of the sentances were about five sentances combined, but it's still a good job.
Dark Diamond chapter 1 . 4/4/2003
Really good. U r NOT shit at sex scenes. I could never write like that. Very cool story.
Ricky Roo chapter 1 . 2/25/2003
Well, to be completely honest, you need to do some work with your grammar. Most sentences are unclear, too long or poorly punctuated. Your paragraphs should be divided with each new subject. However, this is just a fic and is for your own personal enjoyment rather than a serious term paper. :P I just wanted you to know that because it makes it easier to read. and you aren't shit at sex scenes. :)

Feel free to take a look at either of my romance fics, or fanficiton fics.
ChristinaMarie23 chapter 1 . 2/19/2003
No, you're deffinitly not shit at sex scenes, it could be clearer though. (not the sex part, the rest of it).
Snowbird1 chapter 1 . 1/23/2003
good fic. -