|Reviews for Apologies|
| AVIGON chapter 1 . 7/10/2003
I like it. It's very (let me think of a better word than "nice") nice. I love you for using brackets. Brackets are good. Go punctuation!
| peachykeen chapter 1 . 2/21/2003
This one's short and sweet - it's a nice way for me to jump back in to the world of reviewing.
The title is interesting - it's almost ironic, but not, because it's not ironic - I was going for more of a contradiction, but not a paradox (when compared to the poem itself) I don't know how to say it, but it's interesting
1st stanza: teeth-mark tattoos is hard for me to image, but it works well here - I really like the imagry - it's crazy cool
2nd stanza: I really like the way this is structured - it would have been kinda cool to bust out the alliteration to go with destruction and decadence, but I don't know what you could have replaced live with
3rd stanza: I really like this stanza - it's a powerful picture (keep it, or let it float down stream)I do believe that a comma is appropriate where I put it in my exerpt - it's a type 2 compound sentence, fyi
tres bien - not your best, no offense, but not too shabby - I do like the structure though
| lemoncane chapter 1 . 1/29/2003
you dont sound very happy! good luck on finals!
| Obabakke chapter 1 . 1/27/2003
Last stanza sounds like a game, for some reason.
Short and cool. I like this also. I have so many tangerine peels at my house now. Japan winter tangerines.
Good imagery. Teeth-mark tattoos are good. Parenthesis series were cool.
As always, good good poetry!
| makkenjii chapter 1 . 1/27/2003
Gorgeous. Sent a shiver up my spine and down my shoulders (the pleasant kind of shiver).
| Amaris chapter 1 . 1/26/2003
I. Will. Not. Review. Again. Until. After. Finals. Humpht. (
| Black Tangled Heart chapter 1 . 1/26/2003
| account inactive00000 chapter 1 . 1/26/2003
ooo! i like this one, i love the second stanza, the imagrey is so original and pretty and sharp. i like the brevity of it...and the end sums it up just perfectly. very very nice!
| the Queen of Jupiter chapter 1 . 1/26/2003
*keeps the macadamia dreams to eat* Very nice imagery. Makes me sad. I hope not a lot of people float you downstream! It'll be lonely.
Keep writing! Peace ~~