|Reviews for Senses|
| The Zaniak chapter 1 . 3/26/2003
It's confirmed. You don't ONLY write comedy. The final line got me.
| dollface and her cancer chapter 1 . 1/28/2003
Now that THAT less-than-helpful comment is out of the way, down to the constructive stuff. (Like anything I say actually helps.. ha.) The lines that stand out to me:
"And I cried/for nothing/heard the cries of enduring pain"
as well as
"And I mourned/for no one/but not done/nothing won".
Just those lines really catch my attention. The poem works its magic because people will be able to relate to it.. or at least, I can. All of the pieces seem to fit together quite well. I will admit to being a little skeptical when I saw the differences in lines (longer, shorter, longer, shorter) but I'll be equally honest in admitting that you caught me here. Above all else... wonderful.
Favorites list material.