|Reviews for Unnamed Novel|
| Raina chapter 1 . 7/17/2005
For a second, PK10, when I read the email, I thought you were talking about my newer story. And I was going to be very offended, simply because I didn't get examples and other forms of constructive criticism, but then I reread the title of the story in the email. Ah well. Win some and lose some. Just so you know, I started to rewrite a long time ago, 2 or three years ago, and this story was writen about 4 or 5 years ago. I kinda figure now is too late, and I just simply don't care about the story. But I understand, the style is very choppy, and I'm not really all that happy with the story, you know, but there's not much I can do. I just can't imagine continuing at the present time. But thank you for your review, all the same.
| PK1000 chapter 1 . 7/15/2005
Hm, I don't know. I like the idea, but your style of writing is very choppy. Have you ever heard of COMMAS in your sentances? Didn't think so. I'd suggest a rewrite - urgently.
| TheWoozler chapter 1 . 1/29/2003
LOL funny how you attracted to The Sacrificed of all stories... it's actually 18 chapters long and about 100k words... just a bunch of scribbled ideas I wrote during the summer. The prologue is the first of the revised version, LOL. I'm glad you see my review as constructive review instead of criticism. _ I'd like to talk with you more sometime,you're a neato person! *thumbs up* Send me an e-mail sometime. ~TheWoozler
| TheWoozler chapter 1 . 1/28/2003
Mwa! I sense much creativity spurning in this story! First of all, love the concept and the plot! However, you're a little unclear. Don't get me wrong, your writing is great, it just seems that you had this idea and just wrote it all down, like a rough draft. Honestly I think you had quite a mouthful for one chapter. You can easily spread all of this into two or three chaps, and I would have ended it with the written poem by the murderer, which was KICKASS by the way. To make a long review short, KICKASS! Just go back and rewrite, elaborate and spread it out a lil' bit. I don't want all of your icing in a ball at the center of your cake! I'm eager for the next update. ~TheWoozler