interesting so far, i look forward to seeing where you'll take it

nice work! only I think you may need a beta reader, your computer seems to leave the last letter of some of the words - like tenni shoes. oh it made me laugh but. ( thanks for the roman numerals, my lazy brain can't handle numbers when they get that big)

~Kat

Hmm...interesting. It's...different, but good. I feel bad for Aoi, and the life he has to live... _!

My secound story, be nice? and review if ya would.