I was sent here by your other writing page that houses Just A Story? and thought I should give this a viewand it was well worth itJust breathtaking and wonderfully done - i could envision what he saw

but since you asked for critique I will offer it (though what do I know honestly)to pull in the other senses though, perhaps you could try writing HOW he experienced through that particular sensefor example"The smell of smoke was getting more intense with every step" - describe how it was more intense rather than just stating it - The hot stench of smoke was clawing at my lungs, seeping its way through my body with every gasp for life . . .in that same vein you could have detailed the taste and feel of the grass against he tongue

okay - done with the critique because regardless of that I truly did enjoy this piece and that doesnt take away from it at all

KL

" . . . for your sweethearts, for wives, and most of all, for *Virginia!*" Armistice continued.

If I recall correctly, that sounds like a line from the movie Gettysburg. Not exactly, but close. Anyway, the General's name was "Armistead". Unless you were making up a general? It was kind of hard to tell. It was nice to see someone who usually does not write historical fiction give it a shot though. Kudos. You did have some excellent desciption, and yes, they appealed to all five senses. Nice work.

oh my goodness! this was soo awesome! I loved it! Heepwah to you!

Interesting so far, I quite like historical stories. :)

Luv Aims :)