Hey Esfwolf, this story's great! U've got a really good start on ur characters. Keep writing!

hey esfwolf, this is a really cool story! the description is nice and complete, without being too overbearing, and the dialogue is funny too! :D this promises to be a great story, so keep writing!

~ mara ~

heeheehee, this was fun! Your twins are extremely likable, even this early in your story. Plenty of action, just enough descriptives to put the reader IN to your story . . . I don't really have anything to add. Just wanted to let you know that I'm looking forward to more. _

ja ne,

LoK

Interesting read, your desciptions become well formed images when read, well written and detailed world to match... I would be waiting for your next chapter.

good... lots of details... maybe a few too many, but you really get a good picture of the world... I like it, and await its continuation...

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YEA! DRAGONS!