But people have to notice when these things are shoved in their on a thought-inspiring story. I appreciate the direct-matter-of-fact format with some subtleties.

This was an excellent job. You conveyed the meaning behind your story efficiently and effectively, conveying the emotion without making it overly sentimental. Nice one.

This story is excellent. Great vocab, great writing style. Very few spelling errors.

That was so sad.

I hate facing the fact that life doesn't always have a happy ending.

It really was beautiful. You showed a tradgedy without all the dramatic crap, you showed that horrible things can happen to your average guy and go unnoticed.

I so wish I could write like that.