OMG... kinda unique, and powerful. Haven't read anything like this in a while. It's good, in a way. Could be more concrete if you ask me, but then it probably would need an M rating, so that's fine :P

Anyway, good job on this. If you've written anything else, I'd like to read :)

oh wow. that was so deep and powerful that I just couldn't stop reading! You have such a way with words that I could picture everything you wrote. wow. I have never read a story like that before, but I really like it. The power behind it and the meaning wasn't lost at all!

Great job!