love. although i did love your original story just as much. :P

what can I say - this story is very entertaining. I started reading to see what the fuss was all about about and the next thing I knew, I'd read all four chapters in your re-writer version.

Just some housekeeping things, I've noticed that sometimes there is a lack of spacing between words (maybe you type quickly?) It doesn't really subtract from the overall appeal of the story though, so I don't know if any of these are pressing changes needing to be made. For example, in the last few paragraphs of the first chapter:

"The library two floors below my roomwas my haven."

and

"My sixteenth birthdaycame fast"

Also, in the summary of the story (the one attatched to the story as opposed to the one on your profile), You refer to the princess as "Rae"... I think you've changed her name slightly since then.

I am also actually interested in the old version of the story. I saw some updates for it a while back, and the reviews you recieved for it are kinda good, but never actually read it - and now it's gone. Is there a chance that it may be posted again somewhere?

I hope you like to update.

Bread.

aw awsome story.. please continue soon!

O.O

aw... poor girl

:)

hehe i really like this story

Cool.

hi! you're story is quite good. the characters rock! anyway, this story caught my eye because i have one called the prince of thieves (don't worry, the storyline is way different). anyway, feel free to r/r.

Good start so far Update soon! : )

Fantastically fast-paced and still desriptive. A few spelling mistakes.

Please please please please put the next chapter up. please!

Oh! really emotional. SOund like she was never really loved. Are you going to make realise that she needs to let her feelings show in the end like a sappy romance story? i hope not. Lovely story!

Very descriptive and developes characters very well. I really like the last line ' This is were my story begins.' except for that ittle bittle 'h' missing from were/where.

I just read the first chapter (the prologue actually) and i just felt like i need to say that I like it alot! Anyways, I'll continue reading and make a more interesting review when I get more into it.

It's a really good start to what looks to be a very interesting story. Great work. I really can't wait to read more.

Finally an update! XD I can't remember the last version (been so long) so yeah. I think the leader of the thief has very good characterization though! _