To be honest this a great story, very well writen, although in the first chapter instead of calling "Allen" character you may want to call him the killer to add some falvor there. You might want to tell your readers what color the glow is that might help. Again great story keep going I want to read more.

Yea I see some Japanese there. Cool use of Densetsu. "legend" Cool story, nice story line.

Wa-hee, first review. _.

It's an interesting concept.

You know I'll be watching.