Very well written. You slang during the dialogue parts (not an insult some times it is very useful to use slang and bad grammar to get to know the charachters

I don't normally like the alien conspiracy theory genre but I'm getting very into this. Eric is a cute character - I lvoe Shiba Inus!

Yay! Rabbits! :)

Lots of action here, isn't there? You have to work a bit to keep track, but I can accept that in the name of a good meaty plotline. And some unusual species - I don't remember reading about a Pine Marten before.

Nothing wrong with the spelling! Watch the speech, though - you need to write:

“And making them blow up,” added Midnight.

and not:

“And making them blow up.” Added Midnight.

As for the actual story, I can't quite get my head around all the characters as yet; I expect it'll get easier once I'm a bit more used to them (though Jason is a pain already!). More on the way, I trust.