Reviews for A Marriage Of Convenience
ForgottenHope chapter 38 . 7/7/2012
Oh man... You don't know how frustrated I was at reading the last chapter before the epilogue. I was yelling at the screen. However, I love what you did with this story. I find it so creative and I really enjoyed the epilogue. And now I will check out your other stories because I happen to really enjoy your creativity.
swanneckforceps chapter 38 . 7/4/2012
I almost did not read the epilogue, but I am soooo glad I did! Wahey! Happy ending! Good read - but seriously, it's "definitely" not "defiantly".
sneaky-fox chapter 38 . 7/3/2012
I had completely forgotten how much I loved and still love this story! I couldn't remember the ending so chapter 37 had me crying like a baby while the epilogue had me smilling like an idiot :)
Thank you so much for sharing this fantastic story and I will forever be greatful that it had a happy ending.
Candescence chapter 38 . 6/4/2012
I like this last chapter. I was a bit confused for the first half. I was like who the hell is Parker and Livvie? But, then my slow brain finally caught up. This story is really cute. good job
Candescence chapter 37 . 6/4/2012
"In the end, the hero didn't get the girl (or boy, depending on how you read it), the monster was victorious, and there was no happily ever after. Well, actually…I take that back. I do plan on living happily, for forever, and after. And I will. I have to.

I owe it to someone."

I love this quote. great story
Candescence chapter 16 . 6/2/2012
shes stupid
Candescence chapter 11 . 6/2/2012
Candescence chapter 2 . 6/2/2012
hahaha! that's hilarious: Clark and Kent
honey splattered brains chapter 37 . 3/28/2012 this ending is unrealistic because carly and clark were so in love that it goes with the law of nature and physics and math wtf they had to get married and have 12 kids thats the only possible, rational explanation for their future
honey splattered brains chapter 32 . 3/28/2012
xxRivaxx chapter 10 . 12/12/2011
no offence honestly but fuck I hate the beginning of this story I can't stand for girls that take things lying down certainly arranged marriages It was well written but I just can't continue reading it sorry
AI chapter 3 . 8/22/2011
well arranged marriages are everywhere i am pakistani

and in my religion thats the only way to get married but you have to agree then deals off.

but this story is interesting
letsdancewhilethiscityburns chapter 13 . 5/24/2011
"No you cannot bring a bloody date to your own engagement party! And especially not Marcus!"

Oh my god that made me laugh SO hard!
MissDalgaard chapter 1 . 2/25/2011
So, I actually finished reading this a little while ago, but I haven't had the time to review until now.

I like the idea of your story. The plot is enticing and I want to keep reading. When/if you rewrite it, though, I think you should consider how much time/place/how many words you use on the different scene. The beginning scene about the background and the whole 'we-hate-each-other' part takes up quite a lot of words and then it seems that suddenly you remember what was supposed to happen and the climax is EXSTREMELY rushed. So use a little less space on telling the reader how their life is when they hate each other, use some space to tell about the transition, because that is really rushed as well (while reading her declaration of love I was wondering whether is was a joke she pulled of to trick him or maybe that she was just looking for a one night stand) and then a lot more space on the end - especially the part where she decides to leave (give a bit more reasonining) and the happy-ending-part could probably have used a whole chapter more.

Otherwise I think you should consider rewriting the prologue/first chapter because there's SO much history and background and it's really hard to get through and that's not exactly how you pull people in to read the entire story. I actually procastinated reading it because of that.

Also I think it would be great if you got some clues in earlier in the story about the whole deal between Marcus, her father, the Walkers and so on.

I really like the plot line though and I think you have been great at getting the whole rich-girl character in. And her parents. Oh, litlle extra thing: try the been more clear about her transition from rich-girl to girl-who-cares and maybe describe early in the story that she had been differnet while at college.

Lovely work. Keep it up.
drats chapter 38 . 1/14/2011
Loved your story. I think the ending was perfect, especially since it made it seem much more realistic. I also really like the prologue, the way you explained everything. Again, great story, loved it.
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