Reviews for Troubled Heart |
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![]() ![]() ![]() great stuff...i love the ending...keep goin and thanks for revewing mine -korie |
![]() ![]() ![]() good poem... |
![]() ![]() ![]() I liked this poem, especially the last line. It really rings very true. I have one quick suggestion though. This line: "As your hands tear at your hair" I would suggest "As your hands tear away your hair," as I think it helps the flow. Either way, great poem! |
![]() ![]() excellent analogies. at has a surreal property to it that seems to draw you in, though the fact is it's a reality, and thats the beauty of it. the format is very plain though. its good to have sinple sentences for people to understand, but a few complex thoughts or riddles makes it all the more interesting. very good, indeed. |
![]() ![]() nice tara |