Reviews for Stolen Wings
YueDreamer chapter 1 . 11/22/2004
Wow! That was beautiful! *tears* too beautiful indeed..
Roadside Dryer chapter 1 . 12/11/2003
Very good. I love the last line.
Cloudie chapter 1 . 8/5/2003
Beautiful poem. Like how you put the emotions in it.
Chiaroscuro chapter 1 . 4/5/2003
*cackles insanely* You brought it on yourself. Don't worry - I won't be terribly harsh.

You may want to try further developing a sense of rythym or meter. It can be hard to write in such a way at first, though the end result makes the effort worthwhile. This seems more a song than a poem - as I assume you are using 'free' verse. Perhaps you could style a few quatrains for your next endeavour? The couplet of 'sing' and 'wings' is a little strained...even expected. I'd appreciate some more intense imagery - something uniquely 'you' rather than a 'cliched' turn of phrase. You show promise. Must admit, though - I share the same sort of fascination with flight.
mille chapter 1 . 3/8/2003
Omg, u HAVE to make this into a song (if u havent already!)

especially liked the line. 'For the moment he kissed me awake he vanished'

v touchin, and feel like i can relate to it!

Fab poem!
charolastra chapter 1 . 3/8/2003
"He stole my wings with a kiss

He broke my flight and let me fall"

*sigh* Love that part. Actually, love the whole poem, dammit. Is v.v. touching. Fantastic work

georgie b chapter 1 . 3/7/2003
this is great! gosh took me ages to actually find the my pen name urs doesn't come up in search! love ur work!
Winged Poetess chapter 1 . 3/6/2003
Wow, that was really good, very well writen/expressed. I very much like this. Good Job.