Reviews for underground |
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![]() ![]() well. if i happened to stumble across someone like Nathen in real life i'd have dumped him by this point. and that would be a clever thing to do. but since it's a story... it is good. but im a seme, so it just doesnt sit *perfectly* with me. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I tried getting past the third paragraph, but the narrator just rambles on and on and on. This must be a fantastic story if it has received over 200 reviews, so I'm hoping sometime in the not so distant future it might undergo a rewrite where all redundancy and mind-numbing idle chatter will be edited out, and then I will be among the first to pounce on this. Thanks for sharing it at any rate. I'm sure it's lovely. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Just started this story and I am loving it. Wonderfully written. |
![]() ![]() ![]() awesome. sounds great, ill check it out. |
![]() ![]() ![]() ok. so. no, i haven't re-read this far yet. but i have read the like, three? reviews i left the last time i read this.. i'm always appalled as to what a nerdy loser i was when i was anyway! :) i'll try to leave better reviews on the new story this time around. -JB |
![]() ![]() ![]() ahh! i can't remember most of this! like.. any of it. i'm going to read it again. you're not removing it right? either way, i'm excited to read the new version :) -JB oh.. i know i reviewed this before. but under a different name. |
![]() ![]() ![]() oh-my-mother-'efing-freaking-god! now say that realy fast a couple of times and you'll know what came out of my mouth for a good minute [other than drool]. that... that was "oh-my-mother-'effing-freaking-god!" good. i am absolutely [now i really want to hear a british guy say it] speechless, this chapter has left me... rather hot and bothered my i tell you [hopefully that was your intention]. i must also tell you that i am love this. thank you. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I absolutely love this story. I'm definitely adding it to my favorites. I have to admit one of my favorite chapters is the first one. Jaisyn's demeanor and thoughts were just so similar to mine that I almost laughed. lol I really like your characters' development too. I thought that Jaisyn and Nathen fell for each other way too quickly though. Jaisyn also forgave Nathen too easily on some things, but I guess anyone would if they were really in love with the person. Overall, I really did enjoy reading this. Your writing is amazing. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I totally loved it. |
![]() ![]() one of my favorites happy holidays and keep writing. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Some issues with spelling and grammar (like the distinction between its and it's) but otherwise an excellent story. Such odd ways of spelling the names but I like the twist on Jaisyn, much more original than other variations I've seen. |
![]() ![]() ![]() oomg first time reading this story (at least I think so...ahaha) and its great! gonna check yer others out :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Loved this. It was amazing, just sad I didn't find it earlier. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I simply have to say that this one of the best, if not the best, interpretations of the human mind that I've ever read. Period. I thank you much for creating this story. |
![]() ![]() ![]() It's 4 in the morning and I'm too tired to write a proper review, so I'm just going to say that I love it, and it's going on my faves list. _ |