I loved it. Great job D

Wow. I'm kind of speechless right now. this story is so...fantastic? I really like how it ended, leaving room for a sequal perhaps? Please? With a cherry on top maybe?

First off, I'm completely in love with Nathen and Jaisyn. Jaisyn is such an interesting spelling. Have you met people with that spelling cause I have a cousin but his is just spelled plain old Jason. And Kayne and Abel? Funny, sort of.

I think there could be some things added here and there, like a little more insight into Nathen and Jaisyn's relationship. I mean, we all know they're head over heels in love with eachother but...are they lovey dovey with each other or just like to have sex all the time? I know Nathen does but what about Jaisyn? Does he have any complaints with how Nathen constantly wants sex? Also, is Jaisyn insecure just because of how he was brought up or did something really big affect him to make him this insecure? A past boyfriend? Why didn't date when he got to LA? I know that in one of the later chapters you said you had revised previous chapters and fixed plot holes but there are still a lot left. Like, what about when Jaisyn mentions his spat with his brother Kai? What brought that on, and what was it about? Also, the story behind the shirts is cute but when you mean tour, I'm guessing Kai is in a band? A little background wouldn't hurt. Also, a little more back ground on family? I know that Jaisyn doesn't want to talk about his family but why? It doesn't seem like he had a horrendous childhood except for a some bumbps (his grand parents' death, dad dies and consequently doesn't know who he is until later...stuff like that). Then in another chapter, I think it was Matt's chapter, he talks about Nathen's past relationships. How did they affect him? You mention that Nathen was used more than once and that one time he said "I love you" and that turned out to be a disaster...what happened exactly? Why won't he say those words now when he is obviously in love with Jaisyn?

I really like how the overall story feels, it's simple in some parts and then gets complicated and then gets simple again, it's just a wonderful story. I got a little confused with the chapter where Jaisyn gets beat up. At first I thought it was just a dream or a flash back, but then it turned out to be real. I thought I had skipped a chapter the way you just jumped in on the action so to speak. Not a bad thing, just a little disorientating to say the least. Jaisyn seems to have some really bad injuries, perhaps some broken bones but then he kind of shrugs it off and has sex with Nathen. It doesn't make much sense...

Was it really just one week between when Jaisyn met Nathen and then when Jaisyn figures out that he's half-brothers with Jake and Justin? It seems like an awfully short amount of time. Wow, that's kind of surreal to think that in one week Jaisyn's life has totally changed.

I found it funny when Jaisyn gets back at Abe by having sex with Nathen just as loud as he does. Is their relationship better by the end of the story or is it still out of sorts.

I found it kind of weird that a famous rockstar would have a red jetta. could you explain this to me? Perhaps Nathen just has a fetish for red jettas and not some expensive manly car?

This story is just so cute! I absolutely love it. I was wondering, what's going on with you? You haven't updated in a couple of years...where are those matt/kayne and jaisyn/nathen stories? I need more Jaisyn and Nathen! Please write more! Or at least put up some kind of note on your profile saying what kind of progress is being made! That is if you're still alive and willing to write. If you've give up on writing (I don't know why you would) I'd be very unhappy, very sad indeed. Please please please write more! And I left you an awfully long long review just so you could write more in the underground series! Please! Do I need to start begging like Kayne and Abel? cause I probably will...

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I loved it!

sure would be nice if you added a little to your preview... not sure if i read this or not... it seems nice.

AW I LOVED THIS AND THE PARTS ABOUT KAYNE AND MATT WERE KINDA SURPRISING AND KINDA NOT. BUT I LOVE THIS AND I LOVE JAISYN AND NATHEN ANT I LOVE HOW YOU ENDED IT SO SIMPLY. I DON'T THINK ANYTHING COULD AMOUNT TO THIS. IT IS AN ABSOLUTELY AWESOME STORY AND I LOVE YOU AND I LOVE THIS. MAN, I CAN'T STOP SAYING THAT BUT YOU KNOW WHAT? I AM SO HAPPY FOR A STORY THAT DIDN'T MAKE ME CRY AT THE END. I LOVE THIS AND YOU ARE A SUPER FANTASTIC AWESOME MARVELOUS WRITER KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK!

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Aw I love that little ending part with Nathan and Jaisyn making up. AND I LOVE MATT! HE'S LYK THE BESTEST BEST PERSON IN THE WORLD! OR CHARACTER, YEAH WHATEVER, BUT SERIOUSLY I SWEAR I LOVE THIS!

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O MY GOD! I AM SO WITH JAISYN, WHAT THE FUCK!

I LOVE THIS!

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i LOVE THIS i LOVE YOU THIS IS SUPERBLY FANTASTIC! BYE BYE!

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This was a really good story. It was well written and the characters were well developed.

lol luv the story

Aw. Cute little story. Very impressive.

Lovely story.

Holy just captured me. Such pure love and drama...beautiful story!

I love it thus far I will finish the rest tomorrowKiri

I Love it and am adding it to my favorites list!