Reviews for underground |
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![]() ![]() ![]() You know... this has to be one of the cutest emo boy love stories i've read. And i love the character development and how selective you are with information, like how you say 'And I now know why he doesn't like to watch sappy movies.' You don't give to much infomation out. Overall i think it's very well writen |
![]() ![]() ![]() I have been up since 10 pm last night and once I found this story I couldn't stop reading. [insert long pause] Oh my God, this story was awesome. Like, I do not have the words, but that may be because I've been all night but I'm pretty sure it's the story. _ You should... Write a sequel!Dur nur nur! Really, Nathen and Jaysin deserve one don't you think? |
![]() ![]() I u nderstand that sometimes dialogue is needed to get a feel for the characters but this is way too much dialogue. Too much seemingly pointless dialogue makes the stary boring. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Kayne and Abel! I get it! ...Right. Interesting premise. Like the main character. Will read more. Ugg ugg me like ugg. (I'm sick, please forgive me for the bad review.) |
![]() ![]() ![]() The way you spelled Jaisyn kind of threw me for a loop, there, cause it kind of looks like Jaidyn, this girl at my school. x_o; |
![]() ![]() ![]() OH MAN~! YOUR WRITING IS AWESOME~! gah i loved this~! |
![]() ![]() Kayne and Abel? Why am I not surprised. After all the store is called Biblical Proportions. P Very...original. I like the story so far. ) |
![]() ![]() Their relationship was so shallow, and based on sex to begin with. It just made me sick. Friends BEFORE sex, at the very least. Not after. I think I just spent 4 hours reading this, and I just wasn't satisfied. Oh well, I like your other short stories, a whole lot... I think mostly because they and kind of sadly... Now I'll read you new one. |
![]() ![]() JESUS! GIVE ME A FUCKING HEART ATTACK, WHY DON'T YOU? *ok, just breathe, Silver, just breathe* GRRH...gonna KILL Jake...KIL... |
![]() ![]() Sorry that I haven't reviewed before this, I usually do, but for some reason I keep forgetting this isn't a book. Off screen, I mean. _ I keep forgetting to review. So yeah. _ This story is really wonderful. I keep getting lost in it, it's so good. And not many stories do that to me. Even with the killer headache staring at the screen gave me, I'm glad I read this! _ And I'm not even done yet! But...jeez...I think I know who's winning the marathon. *wink* |
![]() ![]() ![]() GREAT! GREAT! GREAT! GREAT STORY! I LOVE IT! It was simply great, amazing and lovely! The first chapter was kinda :s weird, I didn't completely like it... but something of it caught my attention and I couldn't stop reading until it was to late and my eyes were and I was almost sleeping in the board. So I have finished until today! And I LOVE it! The whole story was fascinating! Nathen and Jaysin are so cute! I LOVE them! Nathen was a bit scary sometimes :S Jake also! This story and it's characters were GREAT! Hope to see more of you, you're a great author... you're going to be added to my fav stories list! :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D |
![]() ![]() ![]() :blinks: What? Huh? I'm so confused, that was out of nowhere. Did I miss something? Poor Jaisyn... |
![]() ![]() ![]() Ah yes, poor, *poor* Jaisyn. :rolls her eyes: Oh, and have I mentioned yet how much I love the spelling of his name? (His being Jaisyn, of course) |
![]() ![]() ![]() :melts:: Good-good. No time for me to think of more to say, I must go on to the next chapter. Immediately. Language? German? Meh... Whatever. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I'm very glad you added that little mini-disclaimer at the end, 'cause you had me sort of worried. Not big-time worried, just a little, but still... Anyway, I'm very much addicted to this story, can't believe it took me so long to get back to it. :rushes off to read some more: |