|Reviews for Crumbling|
| SilverAndFlames chapter 1 . 4/16/2005
very powerful and very good. Written with skill.
| Cawfee chapter 1 . 2/17/2005
The author of this poem must be such a homo... I mean who writes poems anyway? lol, jk jk jk jk jk.
It's not bad man, is rage supposed to be the last line of the poem? 'cus if it is it's my only complaint, the tone I got from it wasn't quite of anger more of desperation or helplessness. I'd end with either repeating the first line, something similliar to it or a contrasting like ray of hope. But that's just chinka style, and not everybody's into that sort of thing. So yeah rock on man!
| KB chapter 1 . 2/8/2005
Something deeper than the mind can comprehend
And all you can hear is your breath
Which fades away
i love those linesmy favorite part was how u ended it