Reviews for Drowning
ColorCrayons chapter 1 . 7/16/2003
grinning face of Death? ech, never wanna see that one...i like how you say "a hand" on its own line then you go to "known as Fate"...instead of having that all as one. this was good

color outsidet the lines
saiya-jinmira chapter 1 . 5/26/2003
oh wow ...I like that one a whole lot...its really almost sorta scary ,until you show that if its not youre time to go fate shines upon you...rnrnrnrnrn
Jubei-chan1 chapter 1 . 3/23/2003
BATTLE! Thats the first word that came to mind after reading this! Oh the images! I am guessing either a car crashed into a body of water, because ,"A sound of breaking glass," or that could mean the sound of a hand breaking the surface of the water. Either way its a great visual! I am guessing this is not a suicidal poem, as the subject is struggling against the hands of death. Its an accident. Very well done, its a suspenseful story, much praise!

Jubei-chan
Hopes Forgotten chapter 1 . 3/18/2003
That's good, well written.
orangebunny1 chapter 1 . 3/17/2003
I like it, its different...keep writing your a great writer