i really like this piece, but what contest did you speak of earlier? this has a lot of detail spoken simply...damn im turning green with envy!

Hey Carolyn!

Amanda here! I love this story its awesome! i can picture every thing that's happening! its very detailed you are an awesome writer keep up the good work! now on with the next story! LOL!

Your Friend,

Amanda

that was beautiful. the images you described seemed so real and colourful.. i'm not sure if the format was as you intended or if it should have been separated into individual lines, but nonetheless, it was lovely. i couldn't think of a criticism if i wanted to.