Reviews for Decay
Eirien chapter 1 . 7/28/2004
I like the conflicting images you create, the tension between life and death and the stench of decay creeping in, invading life through the phrase "odour". Great job.
Lina Inverse chapter 1 . 11/18/2003
With your "smell the odor of life" I just imagined rotting flesh. As unpleasant as the feeling was, the point of a poem is to create images, whether pleasant ones or unpleasant ones.
greenfroggies chapter 1 . 8/23/2003
this is brill - with the last line comes a sort of death sentance - excelent - it grows on me the more i read it!

thanks for the review, and would you mind if i printed this out to stick on my wall at home?
Sun Chime chapter 1 . 8/9/2003
Wow! Weird but nice poem you have here. Thought provoking. Loved it.
DarkAngel202884 chapter 1 . 7/11/2003
Very short but hey that's how Haikus are. I like how it's almost contradicting how you breath in the odour of like yet it won't last long. Very well wrtten! _
Asmodeus Sanity chapter 1 . 7/11/2003
yay! i love haikus!

i wrote an (unposted) haiku very similar to this. point wise at least. any way, good :-)
deepdown chapter 1 . 7/11/2003
eww... eerie. very strong. i like it. i like the way you describe life as an odour - cool. brill, in fact. WELL DONE!
Incubabe chapter 1 . 7/6/2003
You are such a good writer!

This is absolutely perfect. So well written!

Diana x
aulliana chapter 1 . 6/23/2003
This is good - no criticism!

Traumspieler chapter 1 . 6/15/2003
Hm, gefällt mir. Aber ich finde es nicht deprimierend...
blinkie chapter 1 . 6/1/2003
amazing. and very,very true. you're a great poet!
Keriana Williams chapter 1 . 5/8/2003
o.o I like! Very nice! Very good! Most of my haiku's are hyper-insane little things o.o Actually, all of them are...Scary...BUT THIS! AH! IT'S AWESOME!
Kesshi Mashin chapter 1 . 5/8/2003
Hn, very nicely done...
Crucified Sanctity chapter 1 . 5/5/2003
This is also very dark... It makes me think about mirrors for some reason... Thankyou for reviewing my work *blushes deeply* you are very flattering...
Dirty Wallpaper chapter 1 . 5/2/2003
whoa, dudess you just put a major damper on my day lol, i was not expecting that last line (i loved it!)

that was amazing the first lines were so innocent and then suddenly...BOMM... you tell me im gonna die. well...

cool, your amazing, kudos
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