Hey! It's me! I like your story you should e-mail me sometime! Yoshi!

that's pretty good, read my story "The Magical Berry Bush" it also has a moral like that and i also wrote it for school! hehe.

lol...Good story. Their are some minor changes you probably could change, but I feel the plot makes up for them.

For example, the first two sentences could have probably been combined into one:

"A long time ago, there was a pure white fox named Yuki (hence the name)."

I would then delete the next to sentences after that. If not for the fact the story depends on Yuki being so clever, it would be a great back story onto the character. However, it almost ruins the feeling of suspense when she is later almost "caught" by Kuro.