Quotation marks! Please! You're killing me here.

You have a very good concept / idea, but poorly written work. No character development or "body" to your story ... left me feeling bored throughout the story and had me scanning the last 6 chapters, to see if maybe you might surprise me with something interesting. Also, I kept on imaging the "Harry Potter" movie in chapter 8/9, and not your own world. All of that said, you still left me waiting, like you have this HUGE potential, but your afraid to really let it out. You are like this wow moment just waiting to happen. And I'm expecting major things from you, there is DEFINITELY some potential in your work!

Wow, interesting. Sort of twisted, but still cute. I love it! Update soon!

Haha, corny ending. This is well written, I like that twists i it. Update soon!

You know...oddly enough, the twins remind me of Pain and Panic from the Herculese(sp) animated movie...just a random thought there.

yes the first scene, I hope to understand it more soon...xP. DIE ELIAS! ...ok lol/

yes it does seem empty, but that's probably because it lakes a plot.

Well, the chances that you will update this story(or any other) seem quite...small, unbearably so. But, I just thought I'd say I enjoyed the ten chapters of this story very much, and wish it had been completed before I decided to read it. I wanted to see what happened in the end...but I suppose there's nothing I can do to change the fact you haven't updated in 2 yrs...

WHERE THE HELL IS THE REST OF IT? FIFTEEN CHAPTERS AND THERE ARE ONLY TEN HERE. WHERE IS THE REST?

Love it, Going to finish?

Love it, Going to finish?

Love it, Going to finish?

Love it, Going to finish?

YAY! Although please don't take forever and a day to finish it! _ i have to know what happens!

Yeah, he didn't DIE, he got killed, there's a difference! *sigh* Honestly, people...