Geez, I never read Sci-fi sort of stuff. Anyhow, it's definately interesting although I'd prefer a more intergrated description of his because I haven't fully memorised the one you gave of him near the beginning but otherwise it was definately interesting. One point: her character seemed more that of a say, 10 year old, than 15.

Oh... Normally I'm very anti-het, but this is nice. And since I'm an avid AS fan, anything like it is great! YAY!

Wow, I hope that's not the end of the story! This story really seemed to keep me in suspense, I wanted to know what was going to happen next. Great job, I definitely hope to see more soon.