That was a nice end to a rather cute story. The only problem here was your formatting, other then that I really liked it. I'll place it on my favorites list. Great job!

Your first chapter is decently written but you should make smaller paragraphs instead of leaving them in such mass. There should also be space between dialogue and description.

Other then that, you have a pretty good story here.

This is a very good start so far. Something short and poetic. I'll be sure to review your other chapters as well. If you wish or have the time, please review some of my works. You might like them.

hm...it looks like you're a taking back sunday fan, too.

that was shameless, by the way. you know what im talking about.

"its times like these when silence means everything."

write for yourself, loser. you're not worthy of being a tbs fan...

All of a sudden, your story wants me to sing in the rain. It's plucky and carefree, but it has that zest to it that makes the world stop all together.

-Kimberly-

good story :D

This is really good!
You should do more stories... _
I would like to know what happens next, but you've finished it really well and the title was entirely suitable.
Cookie please?
~Karasu

Aah... lovely imagery.
The lure of the cookie is too much for my poor mind to suppress!
GIVE ME THE COKKIE!
~Karasu

whoa please write more! It sounds lioke it will turn out to be an awsome story.

OMG! This is so sad. I cried.. and I cry everytime I read it...:(

I like it. It'd be great if you could expand it and go on. I want to know more.

Ok This is like really good but what happened to the boy did he live or what?

Damn men and their manly pride.

Amazing. The wording was flawless, the characters were real, the storyline was interesting and realistic. I LOVED it. Please continue, I'm dying to know more about this!

I love this fic, i think you should write a real fic, i mean like a long one ya know cause its really good i like it alot...KEEP UP THE AWESOME WORK