|Reviews for To Save a Kingdom|
| Sarah chapter 7 . 4/18/2003
Ok...this story is goin pretty good so far. The plot is intriguing. Though I must admit i think that you should develop Gadel's character a bit more...i dunno make him seem a bit less perfect and predictable. It's fun to have sum1 you think you completely comprehend just do a 180 and surprise you.
Another thing is i think you should've given Drianna/Hazara a bit more rebellious nature to becoming a slave to her enemy. Her attitude is a bit too "go with the flow". I understand she loves Gadel but the fact that her feathers aren't fuffled too much with her friend going to war to kill her people is not what i'd expect it to be.
I'm afraid i'm criticizing you a bit too much so i'm gonna start on my nice thoughts about your fic now.
At first i just skimmed past this story not really even curious about it, but for some reason i started reading it and was pleasantly surprised to find it appealing. There is alot you can do with this story and i have a feeling that you wont dissapoint your readers. I really hope you continue with this story because it looks entertaining. I'll be on a look out for your updates so i hope you post a new chapter soon.
| tffny012 chapter 7 . 4/18/2003
wow! it is really good! it makes you wonder what happenes to the queen and shane and everybody! it was really sad to read that the uncle died!
| Anon E. Mouse chapter 7 . 4/18/2003
I must admit, this is an enchanting story. I do hope you will add more to it soon, though I see you already update often. :-) Charming story.
| The Searcher chapter 7 . 4/18/2003
I LOVE IT! Write more soon please!
| LPScissorhands chapter 7 . 4/18/2003
this is great! keep writing, i look forward to reading more, i plan on looking to see if yuv written more at least once a day. that's how much i enjoy it :)
| LiNdSaY.AP chapter 6 . 4/17/2003
very very good! I adore your style of writing. It's awesome. Your plot kicks some serious butt and I can't wait to hear more! Contact me to let me know when ther's more!
| Estelle Stafford chapter 6 . 4/17/2003
I love it, I can't wait to see what is next. Update soon please. Please. Please. Please.
| Estelle Stafford chapter 5 . 4/17/2003
I see some sparks are flying.
| Estelle Stafford chapter 4 . 4/17/2003
Oh my, I feel sorry for her. Will she ever see Shane again?
| S. Breland chapter 5 . 4/16/2003
That's really good.
I'm bad at writing in first person. I try, but I have little skill for it, unless it's a narrative or parody on my life. Or something like that.
Seriously, I think that Havara (lol, forgot her real name already...) should marry someone from insert name of country at war here and sort of forge a new alliance or something? I dunno, I'm just musing. Ignore me. :-D
You're a fantastic writer!
| vintagepostcard chapter 5 . 4/16/2003
I love the plot! This is awesome!
| Weathered chapter 5 . 4/16/2003
Still good! Update soon
| Ms Urania chapter 4 . 4/15/2003
I like this so far. It flows well and I'm interested in what will happen to Havara next. However, you have a few spelling mistakes which distract from the story. Besides that good work!
| Sweetvenom1 chapter 4 . 4/15/2003
I love this story and I hope that you will update it soon. Havara is a good character, but she seems too neutral about her enslavement. she doesn't really struggle but she doesn't really accept it. but other than that everything is great.
| Weathered chapter 3 . 4/10/2003
Yay, you updated! *grin* I like your writing style, good description, and your characters are believable. Update soon!