This is a very good start, I like it.

excellent story i really enjoyed it :)

love love love it! the end is almost anticlimatic but its not, and i don't know how you pulled that off but virtual high five! lol

I have no idea who I want her to end up with.

I sort of want her to end up with Shane but... I just don't know!

I loved this story! it was so creative. The love triangle was really thought out well and i really am glad that she ended up with shane :) I hope you keep up the good work with all of your stories and i hope to be reading many more from you! congratulations on an excellent story.

-beyond imagination

Loved it!

So anti-climatic. Its feels like its just the bones of the story. It's interesting enough to keep my attention for a whole day and its now 1:17am. I think you should edit it and consider publishing it. I'm going to bed now.

I don't understand this girl. How can she so easily dismiss Gadel's love? And what's she gonna tell Shane about the fact that they already had sex? OMG its 12:30am and I'm still going!

Awe, it's over.

Sadness. I gotta say, it was a great story.

Ahh! Shane!

... Ahh!

Thanks for the sounder-outer stuff at the bottom, that helped. I wasn't sure I was reading the names (and etc.) right.

Something bad is gunna happen isn't it?

Sigh.

Man, I'm completely in love with this stor it's great.

I can't believe it's only the 5th chapter. It seams like it should be well into the book by now.

the foreshadowing in the last sentence mad me sad. :(

but good use of it. :)

Aw so good and so sweet! Definately love this re-write! Sequel? Well done. : )

A great ending to a lovely story! :D