Reviews for To Save a Kingdom |
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![]() ![]() ![]() I am in love with this story. it is by far one of my favorites. i love it and i wish that it didnt end. :) your an amazing writer. - I blend in with snow. |
![]() ![]() ![]() -I believe you used the word "pin" when you meant "pen" -When the man at the slave makret says that Havara will grow into a "real hot little thing" I don't think you are using the right era's terminology Great chapter. I really like this story. |
![]() ![]() ![]() -You got one of your homophones wrong. "Soar" should have been "sore" -Corsets at eight, eh? Well, it could have been worse. -Burning people? Now that's just inhumane, dude. Better to run them through with a sword and then burn the bodies. Great job. I know you probably don't want to hear what's the matter with this story, but I can't help myself. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Very interesting and moderately well written. Not as horrible as you make it sound. However, I do not think that an imaginary queen in an imaginary country would talk about God. But that is just my opinion. |
![]() ![]() ![]() This is a very good start, I like it. |
![]() ![]() ![]() excellent story i really enjoyed it :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() love love love it! the end is almost anticlimatic but its not, and i don't know how you pulled that off but virtual high five! lol |
![]() ![]() I have no idea who I want her to end up with. I sort of want her to end up with Shane but... I just don't know! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I loved this story! it was so creative. The love triangle was really thought out well and i really am glad that she ended up with shane :) I hope you keep up the good work with all of your stories and i hope to be reading many more from you! congratulations on an excellent story. -beyond imagination |
![]() ![]() ![]() Loved it! |
![]() ![]() ![]() So anti-climatic. Its feels like its just the bones of the story. It's interesting enough to keep my attention for a whole day and its now 1:17am. I think you should edit it and consider publishing it. I'm going to bed now. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I don't understand this girl. How can she so easily dismiss Gadel's love? And what's she gonna tell Shane about the fact that they already had sex? OMG its 12:30am and I'm still going! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Awe, it's over. Sadness. I gotta say, it was a great story. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Ahh! Shane! ... Ahh! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Thanks for the sounder-outer stuff at the bottom, that helped. I wasn't sure I was reading the names (and etc.) right. Something bad is gunna happen isn't it? Sigh. |