Reviews for McHell |
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![]() ![]() he he he. sound like my mom. very funny! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Lol this story is funny. I like the way you protray the child. It was very funny and i liked the way wrote this story with description etc. I also like the way you wrote the characters reaction to things in between writing in speech. |
![]() ![]() ![]() This was funny and I know how it feels to be in a noisy place when all you want to do is : I think we all know that this fic has had an effect on me. I wanted to leave here, thinking that I'd never find a decent story and that my fics wouldn't thrive here. I gave it (this site) one last shot after reading fanfiction and wanting something more. Something original. Lo and behold I happened to find "McHell" in the spotlight. I was more of an adventure type but I read it anyway. Long story short, I found that venturing out of my prefered genre wasn't so bad. Thank you for restoring my faith and will to post up my own stories and I really hope to find pieces just as good around fictionpress.~TwilightWatcher |
![]() ![]() It's not common to see such skilled writing. The words blend really well together. Also, I sort of find the last part about revealing his emotions quite interesting. |
![]() ![]() ![]() this is halarious! You really captured the way a child acts. Well done! |
![]() ![]() ![]() i loved the "By the way...stop breeding" line. nice story! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I think I am in love with Donovan. He looks like he would get along nicely with my Damien. I love. |
![]() ![]() hahaha! that was funny... and i thought he was the guy behind the counter or something..hahaha...it was really funny..you made me laugh out loud... |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hello. That was funny. Love it a lot bye. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Haham so funny yet so true. -gangster-dolly |
![]() ![]() ![]() Aw, super cute! And very funny! I loved that little girl, and especially Donovan when he told off that father. o Awesome! |
![]() ![]() ![]() "And by the way...stop breeding." Aww, that was adorable. I really like your character Donovan. I definitely go read more of your stories! |
![]() ![]() ![]() That was so funny! I had to laugh, but it's 5 in the morning, so my face is very red and I'm snorting... _ |
![]() ![]() ![]() Simply hilarious. I felt so sorry for that man, hehe. Some people have all the patience I suppose. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I Love irony! The best type of humour there is. This short story maintains interest throughout (which is a very good thing, believe me) and i liked how the comedy developed right up until that last punch line. A Great read |