|Reviews for Winter 1908|
| Amaris chapter 1 . 4/22/2003
Nice historical references once again. Once again, good job. I don't really like the parentheses that much. Keep writing with references, I really think it gives your poetry more style. I suppose eventually references will have to stop so that your poems will be fully original and others can make references to yours.
| ShinigamiForever chapter 1 . 4/10/2003
They need a history subcategory; there seems to be too many history nuts gone to poetry here. I really like the second to last stanza, "hard to imagine.../will matter", the best. There's something so sharp and decently phrased about that.
| Paradoxical Goddess chapter 1 . 4/9/2003
Hmm, I like this one, but I think the last stanza is strongest. *nods*
| the Queen of Jupiter chapter 1 . 4/9/2003
Haha...I read "schoolroom" in the 9th stanza and thought it said "schloom" for a moment...O_O I'm tired, I think. My orchestra got superior today at contest, woo-hoo! _
Back to the poem. I love how you use the colors to emphasize points/ideas.
"the crowd murmurs
in broken sputters
and scuff their boots
in dirtied snow
Lovely, lovely, line. Very scary to me, for some reason (I haven't learned whatever you're referencing, so I can't quite grasp the whole meaning of the poem ;_;). Wonderful last two stanzas, about how nothing will matter. Very true.
Keep writing! Peace ~~
| Princess Mulan chapter 1 . 4/8/2003
this is a cool idea!
| Obake-Chan chapter 1 . 4/8/2003
It's so sad to know nothing of your own nationality. But I wouldn't think that the Japanese would mourn for Korea and Manchu(that's what I learned). But then again, I have no interpretation skills.
I really like how you used the colors red and white a lot(the sun rising! Yea!). Red pupils in white room makes lots of flags? And geishas have the white and red makeup. Yes yes.
| account inactive00000 chapter 1 . 4/8/2003
O, wow, I love this-
Historical poetry is so cool. And I love the Teddy Roosevelt line, he's great...the play on noble/nobel is cool, though i don't know if you intended that, and i love the open/closed door reference!
Gah, thanks for writing this. Now I won't go insane from my stupid research paper -