Those were the most beautiful poems I've ever read!

I normally don't review my own work, but I have to comment on a review. The title itself is not a metaphor. My school is the Phoenix Firebirds, hence the title "Fallen Firebirds"

Perhaps you could continue the metaphor of a fallen tree. However, the title might have to change then. Bring the title into the piece, or the piece into the title. Coherence is necessary here.

Not bad, though.