|Reviews for The Subway Series CHapter 1 Summer Heat|
| Alchera chapter 1 . 4/16/2003
Great descriptions! Try to use paragraphs more, I was getting dizzy trying to read this the way it is. I'm curious to see what happens next- it's classified as suspense so I wonder what's going on with everything. Great description and narrative, though.
PS. Thanks for your review on my story 'Deception.' It was one of the only positive comments I got. Everyone else seemed to hate it, but I don't mind. Thank you though!