Wow, you wrote this in 03! Well I just read this, and I love it! Ah, teacher's romance, how cute! I must say, I was most impressed with the way you wrote about the debating. You must have been on a mock trial team yourself, or watched several, to write about it the way you did. Anyhow, great story!

fantastic story!

xx

So did they win that national mock trial thing? Aw yay Kate & Jake finnaly got together. The only thing though is that I think you should have more thoroughly explained why Kate was so insistent on being with More Me for so long. It just doesn't make much sense, and wasn't really explained. Was it because of when she was little she was fat and so she felt that he was the best she could do and her only hope for the future? I don't know - I think you could have explained that more explicitly. I also think that some of the scenes of chemistry and stuff between Jake & Kat were a little too sudden and rushed. Like you're missing a part. An example is when they started making out. I don't know if it's embarrassing to write or whatever but I feel like there was a transition there that was just missing, and you didn't really explain how and why things happened. Also, after they made out, why did they both act like nothing had happened? If Kate was really dating More Me at the time, wouldn't she have felt guilt or something for cheating on him? This idea wasn't really explored either...

Anyways though, this is a cute story. Maybe you could have just switched the story's location if you really wanted to make it so that Jake's house overlooked a lake... it would have made it more believable, and it didn't really seem like the story's location added a whole lot to the story. it would have been nice to know how their mock trial team did though :) Did Claire & Adam ever get together? How cute :D Hehe.

Just one thing though... I thought that Claire had auditioned to become part of mock trial the year that both Jake & Kat came and volunteered to start co-sponsoring the team, so wouldn't that have made all three of them been on the team for only 3 years?

Also, what was kind of the timeline of the fic? I was struggling a little with that because the story seemed to be skipping and the only sense of time we got was the wedding, which was in December...

Anwyays, cute story :) I enjoyed it, and especially the long chapters.

- Alyssa

I love this story! It was interesting to read about the mock trials. I've only participated in a few mock trials before, but I remember my very first one. It was about Peter Rabbit. I was in elementary school...what more can I say? :)

Hope to read more stories by you!

Hm. Long time, no see. I thought this was such a cute story...it has like...the TRADITIONAL romance. Something you don't get in a lot of stories. Completely innocent and sweet and ending with THE ideal ending: Marriage to the one you love and implications of a happy ever after. Don't downplay this, it WAS spectacular.

A lovely story, very well written, although I thought the ending chapter was a bit abrupt. It seemed to me that there should have been a few more chapters before the epilogue, going over how they did in the nationals, Kat's recovery, etc. Occasionally I noticed words left out of a sentence, but it didn't interrupt the flow of the story. Overall, nice job.

I love this! It's awesome _

-xWhit3StaRx

OMGOSH! That was the sweetest, bestest story I have ever read! I LITERALLY could not stop reading after I started it. I was up till 4 in the morning! YES 4 AM! It made me want to laugh, cry, punch someone, etc... It was just so good! I absolutely LOVE Jack! I mean you would never really think that Kate would end up with a guy whose first comments to her her were "nice legs." I mean that is just so totally gross. But he is SO SWEET! Gosh I loved him. You did an excellent job with this, and yes I am very aware that I am babbling, but I HAVE to let you know how much I lovedd this story! All morning I have been thinking about it. It was just so sweet! OK, ok I'm done. Great work Congresweetie! Keep up the great work with Tangled (which by the way is STILL my favorite story of yours. This one came reallyy close though). _

Aw! That story was so adorable! You can tell that you're a Harry Potter fan. I am too, and read a bit of fan fiction when the mood takes me. Reginald (what a name) was so totally Snapey. And Jake gave me a James/Sirius vibe. But it was a totally good story. So adorable. I didn't understand bits of it; I'm Australian and our school system is completely different. But I liked it anyway. Thankyou!

aw that was so CUTE! I MEAN IT WAS SUCH AN ADORABLE FIC! 1 thing i wondered tho uknow the 1s who kidnapped her i mean didnt they get reported 2 the police or sumink cuz isnt tht a crime kidnappin anywayz cool story!

this was a great story, though the plot took severe turns every now and then that lacked development.. the beginning is absolutely fantastic, but i think you could rework the ending and make it even better. dont get me wrong, i think its good now too! congratulations on a great story!

haha i like this story too much, its making me late! i'll come back to read the rest later!

haha this is a fantastic story.. one small mistake.. did kat go to dartmouth or to the university of chicago? you had her say both.. now, on with the reading.

heh. The sappiness blew me away ) I wish I had my own Jake. dangit!

hey, i definitely read this one. a while ago... it's nice, honey _