As cliche as the first part is, I didn't mind it. I'm just frustrated about this particular chapter. There are so many unnecessary exclamation marks, I could feel her voice from the screen. This is so out of the topic but when someone wears a pink and white ensemble, I find them preppy. I know it's kind of stereotyping so...yeah. Author's notes avoid putting them on top or in stories.

-A. Anderson

Cute story! I love it. A bit fast-paced but very good.

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Cute story! Brian and Jessica are adorable! I fell in love with the characters at once. And I especially liked the alternate ending.

so sweet

Hey patty! Great end for the story! You should write a medieval love story next, i'd definitely read it, hehe. Well, great job, i hope you continue to write! Have fun-Kirsten

woohoo she say yes.. well of course i knew she'll say yes.. but wow! there was alot of silent.. lol.. i wander how long they actually stayed on the beach.. anyhoo.. jus wanna say Good Story!

...that was soo cute. the pebble hits brian head...hahaha, that was funny. and jess and brian wrestling at the beach...all WET! lol... great story

SEND BAK THE PINK PEBBLE! hahahah...eh hem. okay. reading the next chapter...

First of all, haha, "mataku" is like "Sheesh/jeeze" btw, it's one of my favorite words...I usually put it into a whine, lol...
Anyways! HOW ADORABLE! I was squealing along with Jess, haha, but I thought it was a really good ending too! I had almost forgotten (okay I did forget) it was her birthday so I was like "Oh! Birthday Present!" haha.
It's been a very enjoyabl read~hope you do another one.

oh my gosh! that is so cute! I wish you wouldn't end it.. maybe make a sequel and say what happens afterwards like a few years from now! that would be great. Ur stories are really good patty you keep writing and if u quit i'll, well i'll kill U! hahahahah muahaha anyways great story and *hugs* its so cute! and romantic and ah. No words can explain my feelings really. *cry* its over...

HI! Good Job! UR story rox my sox. But y didn't Jorge die? I mean WHAT"S UP WITH THAT! Anyway that's all the story lacks. BYE!

_; HEY! Great end chapter scene thingy ma bobber. Ma bobber. Ma boober. O.O _ I'm so hyper right now...it was so precious! *steals pink pebble* mwahaha, for my collection of strange and odd weird thingies that have little physical value but much sentimental value! *nod* I love it-except for one part, where she said she smelled the lavender soap. *laughs* That part just made me giggle so hard I fell out the chair. I mean...it's sort of an "inside joke", but it's something to do with peaches and cream and guys bathing in lavendar soap..yes...Okay. Anywho. _ WRITE ANOTHER STORY! ;0 One long and pretty like this one. *pets*
End of February, eh? Great fun. I shall be their waiting to read it. ;) Any hints on what it will be about? Spoilers? Plot theives? Character outlines? Mwahaha. Too much fun with probing...*probe probe*
Yes, so write the next story ASAP! asap...love that word...Then we can all enjoy it and pet it. *pets* Hahaha.
~Black Obsidian (BO! O.O Anya Reitz, lol)

Hey Patty! This is a great story you've got goin! I really don't want it to end ( But if it has to end, it better end happy! hehe. Well, I really want you to put up the next chapter, and maybe you could add that the date goes well! That'd be good. Well, I hope you can put up the next chapter, cuz I can't wait any longer! Too good of a story, great job! ; )
-Kirsten

Ah, you're gonna end it soon? Well i liked this chapter except for one thing. you use caps so much it was like blinding why cant you just use ethusiasm in the description? And hhmm soem grammar mistakes but thats okay. i like it and cant wait to see what this girl does. continue.