|Reviews for Brother Sun, Sister Moon|
| Limyaael chapter 7 . 4/18/2003
Yes! Thank you for alerting me! I was waiting for Aurion's and Nefertarin's first meeting. Will we eventually see it from Nefertarin's point of view?
Fascinating, the way the dead dance around Nefertarin. Do all necromancers see this the same way Aurion does? And does madness run high among them? And are those things linked? I ask because so many other fantasy stories seem to have a conception of Necromancy as this dangerous art, though if it's only dark and not insane I could also see the fascination in that.
Thank you for explaining the connection between Death and Sadatix. I think it's human nature to fling gender labels over the neuter forces around us, though whether the labels truly fit or not is something else again.
One small question, about the line "By hand and blood...": Does this mean the Necromancers write their records in blood?
| RivanKnight chapter 7 . 4/18/2003
wow! so the crimson red eye man is aurion? terrific fic, yepz, can see some similar things in here that I have read in 'of death n fire'. this is good. it's obvious you put alot of effort in creating this world purely from imagination. you have a bloody good muse and i must applaud your flair of writing once again. are you sure you are not a millionaire fantasy writer? well, you should be.
| RivanKnight chapter 2 . 4/18/2003
OMG.. this is brilliant! I see you have 7 chapters but I can't help myself. I simply have to review for the 1st two. Are you sure you are just a normal fan ficcer and not a fantasy writer millionaire? Totally blown away by your imagination.
| shadowycat chapter 6 . 4/18/2003
Fascinating so far. The images you create are very vivid and captivating. I'm anxious to know more. The man with the crimson eyes, huh? Sounds ominous.
| shadowycat chapter 3 . 4/18/2003
I'm very impressed so far. You've obviously put a lot of time into working out the history here. I hope I can keep it all straight once we really get into the story. :)
| Limyaael chapter 6 . 4/18/2003
The retreat into silence was unexpected. I suppose I thought Nefertarin would follow her brother's course and resist wildly. The difference isn't unwelcome, though, since it starts adding to the twins' separate personalities.
The description of Tur-Sedat was wonderful. I wonder if the corpses ever breed disease, though? Or would someone consider dying that way an homage to the Daemon?
I can only imagine how frightening it would be to suddenly have your body overwhelmed and taken by a greater force like that. I think you portrayed very well how Nefertarin more or less falls into it. And the bones and spirits following her lead are wonderful pictures.
I assume the man with crimson eyes is Aurion?
| Limyaael chapter 5 . 4/18/2003
So the Dorians raided the village specifically to capture Talanion, then? Ouch. That's got to be a heavy burden for him, if he ever realizes it.
I like the somewhat limited elemental magic. Too often fantasy stories seem to assume that a character has to have command of all of them, when in reality it seems as though the person would never have time to master all the skills needed to, say, separately control water and fire.
The ending intrigues me (well, it almost always does) for what it seems to say about the society. Marriage is primarily a committment founded on children, then? It seems that Talanion can love as he likes, but the woman he has children with, he must marry? Interesting.
| Limyaael chapter 4 . 4/18/2003
That really startled me. Aurion was an attacking Dorian soldier? Somehow I was sure that he was going to be a native. Of course, if the close alliance between the Necromancers and the natives holds true, then he could write from nearly the same perspective.
The description of the crone was wonderful. I rarely see authors try to portray something that's not really evil as anything other than beautiful. Thank you for showing me just how intimidating a picture she would present.
Great to see digitalis again! I saw it first in an X-Files episode, and have always wondered why more people didn't mention it. Sounds like it would be a useful poison, and far more readily available to a fantasy-like society than most modern poisons.
I do have one question. Is Sadatix a separate figure from Death Himself? It seems as though the Daemon is female, and Death male. I wondered if this was just an experience of different cultures making different things masculine and feminine, or if there is a disjunction between the figures.
| Limyaael chapter 3 . 4/17/2003
A little overwhelming, the slew of information, but interesting.
The similarities of the two religions make me wonder if they once shared a common root. Is the description meant to suggest that? Or just that the religions are so similar to each other that really, it's silly for there to be such fierce and bloody resistance?
I assume from the note on the Necromancers that the Dorians don't particularly care for them. Are they restrictions of some kind on them? It seems odd that the High Priest would suspect a joining between them and the natives, but not move to do anything about it. (Sorry to keep harping on the point, but then, I favor the villains not letting the heroes just grow to power unopposed, and facing them then).
Euphonious names for the twins; I can definitely see patterns. Is Nefertarin's name meant to suggest any sort of connection with Nefertiti?
| Limyaael chapter 2 . 4/17/2003
Interesting beginning, though the constant time shifts startled me, and it took me a second reading to figure out how everything fitted together. (Actually, I'm not sure I know how all the plot pieces fit together, but the chronological time is now in order for me). Will the shifts be as sudden throughout the story? I understand it's necessary to establish a certain tone at the beginning, but I think it's a lot harder for the audience to keep up when the shifts are too sudden.
I assume the half-destroyed Sagate tribe is the children's tribe. Will we receive confirmation of this?
The description of the children's birth was absolutely beautiful. And I think that's a pretty unique place for a birthmark.
Two small questions:
-Are the Dorians meant to resemble people of Greek descent?
-There are two very similar phrases, "led away to slavery" and "led to death and slavery" in the description of the attack on the Sagate tribe. I wasn't sure if this was deliberate or not. Did you mean to equate the two fates?
| Limyaael chapter 1 . 4/17/2003
Hello again! Glad to see you that started to post the story. And may be friendlier than ! Really, I think if there's warnings, people should have nothing to object to.
Of course, to me they're more like bait than warnings...
The beginning is fascinating, but I'm glad that there's a definite viewpoint to the first part, and I assume to the rest of the story. I thought it was a god or a collective mind speaking at first, with the "we," and I always find those sorts of stories difficult to read.
I love the line "For Love belongs to Chaos and everything that rides with it." Most authors seem inclined to assign Love and everything else "positive" to Order. I don't read many stories that deal with Chaos as something that could be represented as positive; in fact, I think Louise Cooper's Time Master Trilogy and its sequels is the only series that does.
I look forward to reading more.
P.S. Thank you for your lovely reviews of "Golden Heresy." Some characters are annoying, but they all get their comeuppance in the end.
| Stefynae chapter 3 . 4/17/2003
Oh cliffhanger! And a lovely one also, I might add. Absolutely genius, I love the Daemons and the 'made-up' religion. Can't wait to see where this goes.
| Stefynae chapter 2 . 4/17/2003
What do I think? I love it. There's a lot to soak in this chapter, but it's awesome all the same. I particularly like the way you incorporate your poetry into your stories. Absolutely beautiful. And I love the 'Time: Present'. Interesting way to describe the time.
| Stefynae chapter 1 . 4/17/2003
Oh I love it already. 'A circle has no ends' has to be just about the best opening sentence I've ever read to a story. I can't wait to read more.
| VladimirsAngel chapter 3 . 4/17/2003
This has a real "myth in the making" feel to it! I'm interested in hearing more about the Necromancer's Guild, and the build of your religion.