Ah, the plot thickens! Ellerian sounds interesting. I wonder what her plan is...

Talanion is really going off the deep end, huh? It's pretty understandable, though...he's been through so much and been lied to so many times. I thought it was sweet how Frixa found him, though. She's very loyal!

Whoa...Talanion lost it. But Nestus totally deserved it for being so incompetent. What a crappy priest!

I'm really loving this story so far. I think it's sad that no one has bothered to tell the twins about each other. I'm sure it will result in major problems down the road, of course.
I really like the way you weave the cultural history into the story. It gives it a lot of depth. :-)

You're quite vivid with the descriptions. I got quite a visual with the old priestess...and can I just say, puss is gross? lol

The description of the two religions was pretty easy to follow. The only nit-picky thing I would point out it in the description of the various gods and goddesses, you used the phrase "and then" several times in succession. A little variety would help to break up the sameness.
It seems like Gerenion has a large responsibility. It'll be interesting to see the twins individual paths.

You know, it's terrible that it's taken me so long to get to this story, but I finally made it over here. I thought the way you moved back and forth through time was an interesting technique. For me, the way it was set up made it very visual, and you were able to very succinctly achieve your point. :-)
I have updated my Hyperion Chronicles recently, and I'd appreciate any constructive criticism. Thanks!

It's been a while since I reviewed, for which I apologise. In any case, another excellent chapter. I really liked the synchronicity of the dreams: simple and effective.
I like the telling of the change in Lut-Plumin, but I was not so sure of the way the women's roles were told. It just seemed a little like I was simply being told - surely there must be a softer way to get the same information across? Perhaps through a thought, opinion, dialogue...
Anyway it is a minor thing.

I do like your story because it is very interesting but frankly i think you should include more action and dialouge to the first three chapters. The chapters are good don't get me wrong but i really think you should include more then just explantions because it sounds more like a history essay then a real story. But other then that your story is magnificent.

I got your email, but I'm afraid I couldn't review as early as I wanted to. Anyways, I really loved it! Made me cry a bit, but enjoyable nevertheless. i'm basically torn between wanting Nefertarin and Talanion back and alive again but I know their deaths make the story more deep. Good job :)

Well, short chapter, even shorter review.
Well done, Werecat. Thank you so much for sharing this wonderful, twisted, heart-wrenching story with all of us. _ I totally approve that both Feranian and Belial get the ending.
Such beautiful closing words too . . . and the fact that they have meaning to us readers just makes them even more poetic.
ja ne!
LoK

I'm happy that Aurion got his own little chapter in . . . considering how much of this was "by hand and blood." I also thought it really interesting that the Water Shrine, where a lot started, is now where it ended too. Nice way to close that up - you surprised me by saying that the Tree is still there! I liked that a lot.
Gee. I'm going to have to go back and reread this whole thing to pick up on all the little stuff I know I missed! Beautiful imagery mostly . . . I enjoy imagining along with you. _
*off to the next*
LoK

ARGH. What a great chapter. *sniffles* I don't care if a circle has no ends, and I don't care that I knew this would happen . . . that was so perfectly sad! This line especially:
"The same sad smile dawned upon her face and embraced him. "Then, brother, burn me."
*sob*
I liked how you hopped between their perspectives here. It was wonderful how you kept both of their strengths through the entire story, and managed to focus only on that here at the end of them. Wonderfully done.
*goes off to next chapter*
LoK

fantastic!
truly a great story that deserves to be on paperback. well, you have definitely led me on a rollercoaster ride of emotions with each chapter and im a tad sad that the journey is over. although there WILL be other fics from you to keep me company eh :)
reading your stories always make me look back at mine and i try my hardest to make it as interesting and well-written as yours.
you are that damn good!
RK

Whee! This chapter demonstrates perfectly what it is about your writing that I love so much. _ The absolute dreamlike quality, the easy way in which you tell of things without actually STATING what you're saying (it's very poetic) . . . and so bizarre. Sorry, but it is. lol
This line was so . . . poignant: "What her love for her brother had brought to life only a similar passion could undo."
Am I really that near the end? v_v
ja ne,
LoK