|Reviews for Shades of grey|
| donna x chapter 1 . 4/19/2003
It had some good ideas, but everything was a lil' vauge. The thing that drives most people up the wall, and prolly including yourself if you were to go baack and read this song a few times over, is that it has no flow pattern. what you need, it to decide where you want to go, and make the song go there. if your aiming for the floating, depressed feel (and i know how that goes) you can still have some foramate to the words, but give it that "i don't give a rip" feel. -donna x
| aleppine chapter 1 . 4/19/2003
dude, this has some lovely ideas ... 'come on and show me black/white' etc is a great repeated theme. The depression does come through. Your English isn't as bad as you make out - it's better than the English of some of the English-speakers you'll find around here! Ciao.