|Reviews for Fiona Venus|
| K.M.Mackenzie chapter 1 . 2/8/2008
I'm going to be going for years. It's 60-something chapters. But it's good. I like the bit about levetation and not knowing unless having looked. And I also like the bit about the sun slicing through the curtains, that was good description.
Sometimes you've explained something to heavily and end up repeating yourself multiple times. On the other hand, you can explain five points in the one sentence, which isn't a good thing either. But that's probably the only down point in the first chapter that I've read.
I can offer my editting services if you want. Because grammatically, it needs it. And it would be suitable since I'm reading it from the beginning and wouldn't be a massive chore.
Let me know,
| Around.about chapter 1 . 4/1/2006
| amavian chapter 1 . 12/14/2005
This is good.
| Simplify chapter 1 . 11/11/2005
Oh God. This is GOOD.
| D chapter 1 . 6/7/2005
The dedications at the end, brought it all together.D.
| BigRed-2006 chapter 65 . 7/14/2003
very good story. I really thought it was wonderful. Your a very talented writer and should write more.
| BigRed-2006 chapter 58 . 7/13/2003
er how did they follow them? what did they hide in the trunk? lol well please update soon.
| BigRed-2006 chapter 57 . 7/12/2003
whew. scary for a second. lol well very good chapter please update soon.
| BigRed-2006 chapter 56 . 7/11/2003
Rasmus is crazy. good chapter please update soon
| BigRed-2006 chapter 55 . 7/10/2003
good addition please update soon
| BigRed-2006 chapter 54 . 7/9/2003
awe...so sad...please update soon.
| BigRed-2006 chapter 53 . 7/8/2003
um...was it supposed to be a paragraph? lol well it was a good paragraph lol please update soon
| BigRed-2006 chapter 52 . 7/7/2003
please update soon.
| BigRed-2006 chapter 51 . 7/6/2003
nice addition please update soon
| BigRed-2006 chapter 50 . 7/5/2003
very good please update soon!