Nice... well ok not very understandable, but good use of english, expressions and your plot is very nicely done. Don't worry i don't really get every thing but i get the main picture, (it's just me i'm not very good at understanding such things).

Okay... character-by-character feedback!
Kurai is Okay. She's... not my style... lol.
Skye is so not you, Katy-kins, and you aren't as much of a bad-ass as you think. Still love ya though (and nice spelling!)
Lizki be nice to Raven. She reminds me of Angie with a little more... attitude. Plus, Raven is my favorite character! *grins*
... nothing on william...
Setsuna needs to get in touch with himself. He so wants to be a pervert... methinks him insecure.
Michael is a pervert... no way around that.
*cough* lets skip Gabe before I start ranting, shall we? (You were too nice to Gabe, I think)
Damion needs to get out more... lol
...nuthin on Jason or Clarice...
Anyways, g2g!
Love (always and forever),
Ame No Ai

-crycry- it's not an update! oh well.. it was amusing tho...
K: Look!t's Badass Barbie!
L: She's a bimbo.
LMAO! I await your next chapter in earnest. Keep it up!
_shades_

WHERE HAVE YOU BEEN! DAH-LING, it's been AGES! Not just the chapter, but you're neva on line! -crycry- ...well lets get to what this is all about.
The Wait was worth it! the chapter was wonderfull. I love Skye and all her bitchy angst-ness. _
you're dialouge is awesome. It goes so smoothly. YOu can really get a feel for your characters just by the way you write their speech. That first exchange between Kurai, will, and Iliac was one of my favorites. Iliac is scary, very very scary. and a prick to boot.
heh..."Dead men and armies" is just such a cool lil fragment type thing. it sounds like a band name...i loved that will/setsuna excahnge tho! so dry, so funny...
OH! DAMN TO DEPTH WHATEVER MAN CONCIEVED CLIFF HANGERS! gr...well i cant complain too much, as it seems you've already got the next chapter up...*mutters* well, you guys really pulled it out...hehe...7 pages...seven sentances...s'all good! The chapter was lovely! keep up da woirk!
_shades_

HEY! te-he... I am reviewing like you told me to... so GET OFF MY CASE OK? lol j/k you know I love ya. This chapter was fun... I wish Skye had managed to cause some more serious damage to Gabe though. THAT would have been fun *evil giggles*! anyways g2g... Liz I hope you never get to be a real conscience, k?

YIPE! It's about time you got chapter 4 up i swear to god i was about to take Ann's head of for not putting it up soon enough, but any wayz nice chapter *gets a serious face now*... *long pause*...Well i'm rdy for chapter 5. g'night to all )

FINNALLY! -smacksmack- LOVELY update my dears! the smack, as you've prolly figured- was for the CRUEL and LENGTHY delay. My poor, fragile heart nearly broke with an . . .tici . . . . . . . . .pation.
umm . .ignore that . . .
this chap cracked me up. it was really funny without sounding stupid, you know? For instance, some ppl try too hard and it just comes off sounding retarded. But you two did it perfectly! -glomp- it was wonderful.
My top three favorite lines are as follows (and i had to cut it down to three . .there were some many! -):
3)"Skye cursed the man who had not-yet-created a self-powered vehicle. Rhythmically raising and dropping her head, loosing IQ points by the minute..."
hahahah! YES! I've been there!
2)"he muttered at the ceiling, which rarely spoke to him, except in the wee hours of the morning" heh, been here too, but i was actually talking to FAKE poster . . .-blushes-
1)"'I've deemed that you need to be hit over the head with a two-by-four until you either come to your senses or die, putting me out of my misery'" -dies of laughter- I love Uzzie! Can I take her home with me? Please?
-re-reads chap- Gods, it was all so good!
Oh! one little gramatical thing that slipped past your radar: "Just except it..." It's 'accept' there. But then, who am I 2 talk? I dunt taalk all purdy like . ..
Oh god, the convo w/ conscience was hilarious. -wipes tears off of eyes- Liz . . .of all the occupations yopu may go into, may I discourage you from the consience feild? heh, you'd make a rather . . .-interesting- voice of reason. A suggestion, if I may? heh, well too bad! Im tellin ya ne way! TAKE THAT!
/ahem/ ignore that as well.
right, back to the suggestion. Italizie (cant spell) the consience's voice, it'd make the convo easier to follow.
HA! take the Elivs line and use it well! you have my blessing, Alive is just psyched to have her influence spreading! -
THANK YOU BOTH for remindin me that there is WELL WRITTEN, NON-MARY SUE het romance out there. you've restored my faith in the world of het-ness. -nods-
And what would a good het story be w/o a good slashy conterpart? Mike and Setsuna fluff . . .-dies a happy woman- Cute lil flashback! Will this come to something more later on? -ponders- Setsuna and Mike are an awesome couple, damn the 11(?) years that separate them! heh . . older men . . .m
ANYWAY! lets cut off that line of thought before it goes to far, shall we? Wow, it's taking me forever to write this. You're(Liz) distracting me! I'm good, but reading, IM-ing, reviewing, researching, following a moive, AND eating popcorn is tweaking me out. -grin-
Anyway, LOVELY job girls! Awesome as always. Update soon? Sometime in my natural span? -puppy eyes- you know you cant resist!
Peace, love, and boys in loin cloths,
Sully

Awesome story so far, i'm realy enjoying it, it's interesting and quite different to a lot of other's i've read so far.
Your characters are interesting to read about and well developed, i especially liek the interaction between them and the group dynamics.
I'm a bit confused about the plot so far, but that's probably because i haven't read that far.
I'll have to read some more later, it's kinda late and you've got long chapters (which i love, BTW)
Great job with this so far.
Laters.

Well i personally have to say this is a really good fic, ... except for the fact that it's NOT FINISHED! and i am going to strangle someone if it doesn't get finished soon! (o and i do know where both of the writers live, right guys.) *cackles evilly*, but anyways this story is technically and theoretically a good fic. (just for the sheer fact that it managed to keep my attention through the whole thing, which mind you is very hard to do.)and well can't wait for the next part to come out (no seriously i can't!) and if i don't get my way very soon the molesting penguins will be finding there way around town! Well hope that was a great ego booster for the writers (o and plz note i was not technically awake when i wrote this so merry x-mas to all.)

OHH MY GOD! I LOVE THIS STORY! You better add more, I don't like waiting! (lol) ohh yeah! I love the boy/boy relations ship! THEIR SOO CUTE! I like it alot, and It's a really great plot! KEEP GOING!

Loves yas,

Stephanie

NO! CONTINUE WITH THE STORY!

I like this story a lot. And I've reviewed every chapter. A first for me!

::grins:: keep going

Good, good. I like so far. Chapter's are a little too long though.

And now you have seven reviews. I like it so far; it's creepy...