Reviews for Last Breath
darkmiko chapter 1 . 7/19/2005
good poem i like it
Summerdazed chapter 1 . 8/13/2003
VERY GOOD! everything fits rite into place! :O) Plz R&R me if you're free!

summerdazed
endless040 chapter 1 . 7/17/2003
Great poem. Awesome job.
Grendel chapter 1 . 7/17/2003
Liked it, not what I would call a poem. But I don't know what I would called it anyway... maybe a thouth?
Katterree Fengari chapter 1 . 7/12/2003
hmm...yep, that's interesting, kew how u ended on a question...despite lack of questio mark...
Sunflower Philosophy chapter 1 . 5/26/2003
Ohh, I love this one! It's so small but it says so much, like an optimistic little child looking up at me. I love it, I love it, I love it. It's like a little prayer I could carry around in my pocket.

And trying is all that's important! For in what do we succeed if we do not try? Whether or not we finish a task is completely besides the point. The point is that we tried our best and we gave our all and we achieved an inner peace with ourselves.

Hum, hum. *tilts face up to the sunlight to smile at its caressing warmth*

m* Sunflower, anyone?
Artemis Astralstar chapter 1 . 5/22/2003
wow, powerful.
midnight dreams chapter 1 . 5/21/2003
*smiles* i like your writing style. I admire the fact that you don't let form limit your poems. *thumbs up* yay you! :D Read mine? :) thanks.
Psycho-kyugurl chapter 1 . 5/16/2003
You tried at least. I might not .
triskaidekaphobia chapter 1 . 5/16/2003
Wow, great, kinda haunting...
Werecat99 chapter 1 . 5/15/2003
Short, but definitely interesting. And now I feel I must go and finish my story chapter.
The Lady of Shallott chapter 1 . 5/11/2003
Nice!

I only have one criticism, which is that you switched tenses part way through.
Yvonne chapter 1 . 5/9/2003
hm... yeah cool! its different frm ur other poems... variety is good! short yet powerful...
not sure yet chapter 1 . 5/4/2003
short as you said, but extremely powerful, i love the way you set up the poem and the style, its different, which is good, very sad too, beautifully done
nimue webweaver chapter 1 . 5/2/2003
ok im speachless
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