Reviews for hindered we are the common humanity
Elephant-Artist chapter 1 . 3/8/2009
Very nice poem. Please read and review my stuff.
Scars of Fantasy chapter 1 . 6/19/2003
really, who does?
E. Gao chapter 1 . 5/23/2003
I love how you wrap many aspects of life together with such a powerful theme; excellent show of talent and excellence...

miah [worships] -

love the first two stanzas the best.

GoodbyeDeleteThisPage chapter 1 . 5/13/2003
"I was not the one who wrote, "the goalposts

look like crucifixes" Robert Cormier wrote in his book 'The Chocolate War' that the goalposts looked like crucifixes. Is this where you got that?

Wonder poem, a post excellent form.

Paradoxical Goddess chapter 1 . 5/1/2003
*coughs* you did NOT just offer to sell your soul for my crap WHEN YOU CAN WRITE LIKE THIS.

*strangles you*

oops. no soul now anyway. *sidles away nervously*

grr i hate your talent
account inactive00000 chapter 1 . 4/29/2003
I am

picturing Boss at his leatherchair and Motherwife's hair

uncurled and the boy in his bedroom, watching maps stay still-

I am picturing Monroe as Little Red Riding Hood-

I am picturing Ernest Hemingway being earnest

Ah God! I love that whole stanza. Ah...this entire thing is simply filled with beauty, with cynicism, with truth. Wow. God, this is amazing.
Theodor chapter 1 . 4/25/2003
Oh, I'm ashamed to say I didn't know you wrote original pieces.

This is a lovely thing, with a beautiful language and a compelling air about it.

"and want something truer" This line did it for me. A dreamer's death, yes.